The day the sand dunes withdrew

There is a space that is never filled...a void where all the darkness flows. That is where alone resides.

it is

dense as fog at two a.m. in fresno

and

arid as parched tongues in sahara

here

 

within this myriad miles of void

empty sand stitched patchwork

like honeyed fingers of

such an arresting nothing

 

solitude with his southern diction

(wily one) 

 is ever present in this sting of tumbleweeds

he kicks his seductive heels up

pulling his hat brim low

takes a rough hand in

drawing long and slow on his fine cigar

smoke swirls seep this bluegrass wind

his stern lips of retribution pursed 

 

the smooth croon from his acoustic

drifts like heavy nostalgia

breaking her like cracked up roots

onto the sweat stained earth

gathering to the suffering

 of forgotten....

seldom in rememberance of....

and eyes that never will forget

 

here is the realm she travels

like regret and naked feet

to his magnetic and vagrant beat

 

Reviews

[Forest Green]

Driving south from Fresno offers some of the best desert riding imaginable; the road is flat, the wind sometimes objectionable, the sand soul-stealing, and the sunshine incredibly arrogant...through it all man is it fun...!!

Your poetic insight is amazing...!

Excellent...!

[Chris]

Getting "IT" wrong can be a way of life... but admiting to it - well, yeppers.

I sure found a tangent to flow with and a totally different perspective that was beyond the ballpark - neither fair nor foul ball. No defense BUT I swear the mind wasn't closed even if the eyes aparently were.

Take care,
Chris

[Kat Collins]

It's poetry, but a story....beautiful. The imagery is strong...an old western come to life.

[Robin]

"eyes that will never forget "

poetic glistenings upon the memoryscape

[Moflo]

Again, you really have some divine imagery in these poems. I like how you describe setting, it is captivating. Great write.

[kdpgrahi]

Beautful. Nostalgic feelings well put in a poem.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

memories..........hauntingly beautiful work Christie

[Joiedevivre]

so cinematicly poetic! What a piece of writing, you certainly have a writing style and I LOVE it!
here is the realm she travels

like regret and naked feet

to his magnetic and vagrant beat


This has such power and a beta of its own, i can almost see her like a flame, dancing to his rhythm in his field.

[L]

yeah I really dig your stuff - you write on topics that often (usually even) turn out horribly cliched but somehow you dance around that trap and they turn out interesting, unusual and a joy to read

[OT]

I love your titles!!! so poetic - the title in itself had me hooked ha - then the words! you have some of the best lines - love, love, love - "bluegrass wind" - who comes up with images like that?? or sounds rather ha - stunning - so many brilliant lines throughout - nice!!