Berries and retrospection

a brilliant sun licks the shore

with slivers of nostalgia

 

strawberries

bursting like rapture

fat and heavy

hanging low

on summer vines

ripe and red as bloodstains

with my thousand echo cries

 

beyond the reverie of my sorrow eye

 is the sea beckoning

murmuring with overweight blue lips

to taste its eternity

fling your soul to its inevitability

listlessly i twist to its wild untamed wind

its gypsy skill of being free

sand thrown upon my lids like density

don’t you remember me...?

 

sweet lush wet storms on my lashes

and your fingers raw in my hair

like the callouses of rough wood

so tender they lay there

tangled into my skin

licking tongues of chaos

(yin and yang entwine)

 

sky sweeps like the great july prancing

and your roaming palms unreel

feral

to steal my broken dreams

you

sexy in bare feet and mussed hair

 

strawberries

strawberries everywhere

buried in the green sway of fingers

 by the great vast alone at sea

 

my mind drifting always

to the pain of

 you and me

 

 

Reviews

[Tommy]

Oh my! This is a treat for the mind; This piece takes me to a summer I spent in Cali, the Bay so close by the fresh strawberry fields and the woman who stole my heart by my side seaside…It all tasted so sweet at that time…

I love the images in this verse:

“sweet lush wet storms on my lashes
and your fingers raw in my hair
like the callouses of rough wood
so tender they lay there
tangled into my skin
licking tongues of chaos
(yin and yang entwine)”

Great Write Christie!
RLG,
Tommy

[Blogger]

This is a thoughtful, and romantically yearning piece. Nice use of a wide variety of words.

[schanzilla]

Dig the imagery of this one. So honest. You are a great writer.

[Moflo]

Very nicely written! Great descriptions and fantastic imagery! You have a nice way of blending the erotic with the nostalgic in this piece and the tones blend together very nicely. Great job, this was an excellent read!

[Robin]

this piece fills the senses , every word to be savored , its feeling will linger ..

[Chris]

Even the title fits...

[Art Sun]

such passion can be felt from within those memories...you weave a dream of those very thoughts and formulate for us ... those memories...

nice work Christie...

[An owl on the moon]

There is something so sensual about the sea and strawberries, and your words dance in the tune of despair and longing as well. Recollections play melancholy here, as you weave the world through your sensations and skin..

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Christie, this is fabulous, sensual and yet innocent........a masterpiece.

[SilentVerses]

Imagery danced back and forth as I scanned the talent of your words, such passion portrayed by the sweet lightning of your metaphors. Lines that on their own would have held the weight of meaning that the rest of your words cradled in their grasp, and what beauty you behold in the grasp of a love lost or recalled. To read and step into the memory you gave, humbling to those who continuously run and flit about.

[L]

Love some of the imagery -your opening couplet is excellent -

a brilliant sun licks the shore
with slivers of nostalgia

Like this one a lot