Twenty-One Trials

What is the word for the feeling that you have done your best, but it isn't enough? Whatever that word may be, that is the inspiration of this poem.

Twenty-One Trials

Twenty-one trials of fire

How many more tests to take?

None of my effort is fake

So don’t call me a liar

When you know my work first hand

While alone I took my stand

Feeling my body now tire

Still striving to do my best

All I can do now is rest

Author's Note

I decided to try something different. 7 syllables, 3 lines, equal twenty one for each stanza. I also toyed with the rhyme scheme a bit. Feel free to tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Gee]

Trying your best but it never being enough in the work place is more common place than you would think, but rather than training, advising, helping it is easier to slam your efforts. I suppose this also applies to your personal life if living with half wits:)

[Kane Hagwood]

This is all VERY true. I've witnessed how often leadership, be in within a family unit or a workplace, can be so easily abused or neglected. Thank you for the review!

[W. Barrett Munn]

Kane,

I think your idea is strong and the idea of syllabic verse a good choice. I would urge more experimentation with syntax as poems are so compressed that
throwaway words like “so” should
only be used if syntactically necessary rather than syllable filler.
You are free to do as you please but I only use Times 3 as my font without color.

Winston

[Kane Hagwood]

Thank you for the constructive feedback. Normally, I don't really mess with the color of the font, but I wanted to expand and try something just a tad different. Thank you for the pointers!

[Chris Shaw]

I enjoyed this and read the first, second and third lines in each stanza as a poem too. Lots of little poems. You can do no more than your best. I am trying to rack my brain for a word that covers that situation.

Chris

[Kane Hagwood]

Thank you for the review, Chris. I'm STILL trying to figure that word out, but maybe one day the right word will come along and fit into place.