When

I found this one from way back when (about 3 years ago). I figured i'd post it.

When oh when shall our paths cross again

Our fondness left unspoken or unwritten

Consistantly asking such a question until then

to a blind pair of eyes

and a heart so smitten

Will there never be that day

that your road will cross my way

Our ambitions left rust-caked and undriven

That sadness we'll send

to our feelings my friend

will remain unrecieved and ungiven

Reviews

[Sukriti Suki]

very well written...the flow of words infuse a feeling of deep desire...well done.

[Brianna Brie]

Again, you have a very strong ending. The kind that leaves an impression!

[rachel]

love it :)

[Claude]

I love the imagery this piece evokes. The scenario is very familiar and examined with heart. Bravo!

[Vanesa Markovic]

"Our ambitions left rust-caked and undriven"
What a great use of words.
I know this grief all too well, a lovely piece.

[Ramiz Ilham Khan]

Wow - Bitter aftertaste :-)

[BlueEyedBandit]

I like the techinque you use. This is also quite bitter sweet and touching. I enjoyed this piece.

[Vanna Renee]

I admire your rhyming technique!!!!