When

When

A Poem by M.a. Benjamin
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I found this one from way back when (about 3 years ago). I figured i'd post it.

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When oh when shall our paths cross again

Our fondness left unspoken or unwritten

Consistantly asking such a question until then

to a blind pair of eyes

and a heart so smitten

Will there never be that day

that your road will cross my way

Our ambitions left rust-caked and undriven

That sadness we'll send

to our feelings my friend

will remain unrecieved and ungiven

© 2010 M.a. Benjamin


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I really like it, it reminds me of my best friend

Posted 10 Years Ago


So beautiful yet so lost and all scattered
Amazing

Posted 11 Years Ago


Simply beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


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really enjoyed this, it resonates with a sort of beautiful and adult melancholy and the last line really brought it home, well done...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Dissapointment,but in the end silent acceptance, great write:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beautifully expressed.."ambitions left rust-caked and undriven" ..How does it get to that? The unspoken words the unheard answers...Must they remain turning in the vortex of out minds forever?

Posted 12 Years Ago


Poignant, the words our ambitions left rust -caked ..is quite good.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Quite sad and wistful, I guess, but it comes across as a form of acceptance and a realization that life must go on. No self-pity here, I would say. Very good write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


i can hear this as a spoken piece...enjoyed how the first step from this piece was the title...but that's just me...i enjoy brevity...when less is made more by the gentle ambiance of its solitude...rusted joints may just as well be melted down for what they're worth

Posted 13 Years Ago


Last line took me like a landslide.Will remain unreceived and ungiven, unrequited love in motion or love from a distance.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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