Death

Life is more beautiful knowing that we’ve taken a loan on death

Even light is treasured more when there’s darkness

The sunshine appears after we’ve passed through the storm

Life receives injuries from us and

is lonely because of the wind and

We want to be right

but we're always wrong

Were we born to be wrong?

Is life something like that?

In the end, for our whole lives, we don’t know what tomorrow will be

The people I thought were on my side can change and become vicious

like folding paper, a problem that ends if we go have relationships

In a moment he can be sneering at me from the other side

It’s just the same, there’s no need to get mad

Some parents don’t have children when they stand in front of money

We have to set it ablaze because the world is too cold

so nobody can know, rather than doing me

at times we’re right, I don’t know if there’ll be a time when it doesn’t seem wrong

but the thing that we all learned at some point was how

to step on someone, to catch them, to erase them, to hate them

Reviews

[sette]

i can relate to this poem because it is what reality is all about

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much!

[Riddhi]

I loved this poem.. Actually I myself fail to understand what death means..You wrote a wonderful piece and you expressed yourself so well in this poem...The opening para was the best one..I must say this was one among your best poems that you wrote so far here...
Keep on writing...

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks! It just was my thoughts on what death is!

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful words written.
'Life is more beautiful knowing that we’ve taken a loan on death
Even light is treasured more when there’s darkness
The sunshine appears after we’ve passed through the storm"
The above lines. Real and raw words. This is what poetry should be. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Akash gaikwad]

I think death and acceptance has lot to say they are interconnected I see this poem screaming for acceptance.... You have written it powerfully especially the start. Thank you!!

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much! Glad you liked the subject!

[Onlyme]

I love the opening section to your poem. Life is beautiful knowing that we've taken a loan death. Even light is treasure more when there's darkness. The sunshine appears after we've passed through the storm. It gives hope meaning and true understanding of living a life lived.

And your poem gets darker and sadder. As you look deeper into the understanding of your storms. And why you feel betrail, hurt and anger and rage. At the ones who hurt you. But hate solves nothing. Just causes wars and breeds unhappiness and sadness and bitterness. Learning to move on. And leave that part of your life behind. And take hold of the new life you have now. And feel blessed.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks very much! I am glad you liked the meaning of the poem.

[Bare Trees]

I think you're trying to explain too much.
Less wording and more showing might help. (show don't tell)

The theme of the poem is death
yet by the end of the poem you seem to go off topic.