No one, no one knows

I hoped to meet someone who would make me not able to fall asleep late at night

Someone to become my friend that I can talk to

But my hopes did not come true

I started to hate myself

For a long time, I hated myself

I hated myself for senselessly crying

The ocean has dried, there are no waves

Not even the soft wind blows in the deserted island in my heart

While I was erasing myself, not knowing the owner of my narrowing heart

I’m not alone, will you listen to my story?

I want to lay down, I am crying too, I know how you feel

It’s kind of hard being me

I’m broken, I realize this

But it’d be wonderful if you still wanted me

If only I could be patched up

I’d be rather beautiful

So don’t give up on me, I beg of you

The shadow of loss seems to only be close to me

Spreading densely and somberly like poison

When the dangling faith plummets, you’d still make off with

The final breath we’d struggled to make

No one, no one knows

No one holds me

No one embraces me, no one accepts me

I even tried to say goodbye to the bad world while looking at the stars

I tried to pray and as I look at you all who are in pain

I try to comfort myself

The world isn’t all that beautiful

The choice of my own life, I know that truth

The joy of having a choice

The choice of right now

I trust my choice that chose joy

From now on, everything is beautiful

I’m thankful to myself for overcoming the pain

If You Should Ever Feel That You’re Fallin

I Will Never Let You Down

Love Is In The Air And It’s Calling Out Your Name

Choose to live (choose to live)

I want to live and breathe (It’s a beautiful life)

Choose to live (choose to live)

I want to live and breathe

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Despite being a story of feeling low self-esteem, your poem is interesting & pulls the reader along becuz of your strong storytelling. We want to know what is next in this story. To me, the saddest aspect of this narrator’s point of view: he seems to feel like “nothing” without having someone special in his life. Lots of people feel this way, but it’s a sign of low self-esteem. Sometimes feeling this way chases people away, becuz a lonely person puts off a sense of isolation. Eventually it’s better to learn to believe in ourselves & to feel complete, even if there is nobody around to appreciate the good person we are trying to be. If we just keep on being the best we can be, eventually we will attract more people who have similar values & tastes in life.

Since this is quite a sad sounding story, the reader is hoping that it’s not all about hopelessness. That’s why I was so glad that the tide turned around toward the end, with a sense of hope. There’s already too much misery in this world, so I would try to add a note of hopefulness when writing about something that feels mostly bleak . . . just as you did here. I noticed that I was more engaged when I was reading everything EXCEPT this stanza: “The shadow of loss seems to only be close to me . . . and so on.” The writing in this stanza feels more imaginary, whereas the rest of your poem feels realistic & immediate, like the narrator is talking right at me about his actual life. Not saying to change anything, but just letting you know how it reads (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much for your critique. I am glad you liked the hope in the end!

[Red image]

This is a great read and I am glad to have stumbled upon you, keep up the great work!! I really feel and relate to a lot to what you have to say I’m glad you overcame that.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much! I am glad you liked it!

[sette]

everyone needs a friend to share the pains and happiness in life there is nothing wrong in reaching out to start a meaningful friendship

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you!

[¿]

This sounds like a beautiful song to me,...going one line to another makes the previous one echo in the mind!!
Coming to the poem now....tis great....My textbook has a story that's morale is if anybody knows his own truth...hardly anyone can make him puzzled in life...Even if you're in the smallest position on earth and know your truth and accepted it then you're ready to face "Anything"
Here you know your truth....and that's what great to read☺

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks very much!

[Riddhi]

I loved it..It was a heart touching and beautifully written poem.You expressed your emotions so well in this poem..Right from the starting till the end...I loved every bit of it...You are becoming a great writer and you are improving by leaps and bounds with your every poem.
Good job..
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing.
Riddhi

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much! I am glad you liked it!

[Najam Us Saher]

You express your emotions really well. Your words scream for love and attention.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.