Soju

Must've been a tough day. I've only had two beers and I'm gone already

Took a deep inhale, now that feels better

Life's spring and fall, nowadays, good days go by so quick

Some make me someone I'm not. Fool around and leave just like that

Wonder if I was strong or just dull

I'd tear up once or twice a year but now I cry at the hopelessness of it all

When I liked the song, I kinda melted, it's all stress

I endured it all cause I didn't want to collapse, I held on cause I didn't want to evaporate 

When it hurts, just cry, cry all you want, it's okay

When sadness disappears, and tears begin to stop

I'll wipe your tears underneath your eyes with my thumb 

I say it's sad, I know, and that's just too bad. I open a new bottle of soju 
You say you started drinking around 15

While drinking, burst out and we don't feel alone for a while and call each other friends

Sometimes sadness stands in my way, laziness captures me
It seems that everyone else is going forward and I'm the only one standing still 

I can't wipe the question 'will I be alright like this?' out my head

When I just follow the motions of life I feel like I have become a ghost 

Loneliness is like a grave and you will always pull me out of it, like the verse of this poem 

When it hurts, just cry, cry all you want, it's okay

When sadness disappears, and tears begin to stop

I'll wipe your tears underneath your eyes with my thumb 

I don't want to be alone so I hold on to someone and won't let go 

But the way back home is always lonely, I turn on the TV and hope I fall asleep

I want to stay friends with just a few that don't score me with ratings

So that I can just get over that hump of a day and be myself and live myself

Sometimes everything feels so meaningless, I wonder why I am living or where I'm going

I put on a mask, I use my fake name, I wonder if it's really me.

When I'm like this, anyone who'd spend time with me is priceless

The world is empty full of lies, but we don't judge each other like a joke

Close your eyes for awhile, you've had it hard for quite a while

Just you wait till this rain and storm passes

When it hurts, just cry, cry all you want, it's okay

When sadness disappears, and tears begin to stop

I'll wipe your tears underneath your eyes with my thumb 

Reviews

[Moonie]

I like this gentle and emotive write! "Loneliness is like a grave and you will always pull me out of it," sounds beautiful!

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks very much! I am glad you liked it!

[cjmazey]

you are very good at putting your feelings into words

I can very much relate to everything you said

perhaps if went through this line by line, and tried to show things, instead of telling, this would be a beautiful poem

it is very good writing for what it is, though

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much! I am glad you liked it.

[cjmazey]

you're most welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i agree with previous comments. This needs to be made into a story. It is really prose rather than poetry.

Brevity, compression make poetry different from prose. I would consider writing a short story.
It has a moving theme.

j.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you! I will try!

[Les Chats Heureux]

Have you considered writing this like a story ?

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

I haven't really thought of it. I might have to do it later since life is being stressful right now. My fiancee is in the ER with pregnancy complications.

[Onlyme]

Loneliness is a soul taker and a heartbreaker. Breaking the cycle is not easy my friend. But speaking out about it does help and ease the pain. You are never alone my friend we all feel how you feel at times. Admire you for your honesty and openness and frankness.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words gentle with a tone of concern and kindness.
"When I just follow the motions of life I feel like I have become a ghost
Loneliness is like a grave and you will always pull me out of it, like the verse of this poem
When it hurts, just cry, cry all you want, it's okay"
The above lines. Solid and needed. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks for calling it amazing! I am glad you liked those lines I write!

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well and you are welcome.

[¿]

The warmth of this piece melts hardened emotions...lucky the one who has you to wipe tears when sadness discards from their life...yess everything's gonna be alright with them!!
And so I wish everyone had relaxing shoulders and tears wiping thumbs so never they had to worry bout the criticism of outer world...as they'd see their life in the helping heart...
Thanks for sharing this amazing Ji Suk😊

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks for calling it amazing! I am glad you liked it!

[Donna]

This is very emotional and very good. You have to get it out once in awhile, crying, anger, whatever! Nice writing!!

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much

[Riddhi]

Actually , i really liked it...It was so emotional and actually every single line touched my heart...Its the best piece of yours that i read till now...Actually , since i see kdramas i do know , what soju means but i wonder why you kept this poem's title as soju...I mean to say its such a sweet piece , and actually it is one of those poems that striked my heart so much...You know i loved every single line of this poem...Like when you said , When I just follow the motions of life I feel like I have become a ghost
Loneliness is like a grave and you will always pull me out of it, like the verse of this poem
When it hurts, just cry, cry all you want, it's okay
When sadness disappears, and tears begin to stop ,
that just touched my heart and also , I want to stay friends with just a few that don't score me with ratings
So that I can just get over that hump of a day and be myself and live myself
Sometimes everything feels so meaningless, I wonder why I am living or where I'm going
and also,
I put on a mask, I use my fake name, I wonder if it's really me.
When I'm like this, anyone who'd spend time with me is priceless
The world is empty full of lies, but we don't judge each other like a joke..
Actually , my list is going to be endless...
I must say , i loved every bit , every line of it....It is actually the best poem i read on writers cafe because it actually touched me...Because my present condition exactly matches with the one described in this poem..But the difference is that i have got noone to wipe my tears...
Keep it up...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
Riddhi

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much. I am glad you liked it!

[Riddhi]

I liked it because it was worth it..

[kitty]

Human feelings and emotions ~ all pent up, sometimes its good to cry - out loud: it relieves the heaviness in the mind! Good though to have that 'friend' to share the unpleasantness in life but who can one trust?
A strikingly emotional piece.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thank you very much~

[kitty]

This draws the reader into the reality of what an individual is going through..sort of suffering in silence... behind a mask!

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Yep! Thanks! It's based on how I feel!