With These Hands Of Mine

Though your heart may shatter and be torn
Will we die in this world with no hope to hold onto?

You bright with determination and I blinded by my hatred

All is wish is to your hold your hand 

Only your smile kills the darkness inside me 

 

With these hands, I try to hold what I cannot seize; happiness

I'm like a paper boat thrown into a violent tsunami 

All my strength has been blown away

If I can go on and not lose my way on this winding path

I will sacrifice everything for your sake 

What I really need is to stand up against all the pain like you've done for years

You are still lost in a dream

I am still the dreamer that cannot rest 

I will now open my eyes and chase that hope that I will be at your side as if we're blessed

To live a life where all of me is alive 

Deep inside I will give

All my love to you just to live happily

I won't regret making this wish of mine because I know we were meant to be 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy your words and thoughts in the poetry.
"With these hands, I try to hold what I cannot seize; happiness
I'm like a paper boat thrown into a violent tsunami
All my strength has been blown away"
The above lines can stand alone. Thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks for calling it outstanding! Glad you liked those lines!

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome.

[A.Tarek]

I liked that, I enjoyed this one for real.
Good ending as always with hue of sadness and happiness.. loved it

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks ! I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Micah]

I love this poem. I really like the symbolism you used, especially the paper boat. And the whole idea that two people so different can make each other happy, and even show each other more about themselves. There seems to be a shift, that you went from a person "blinded by [your] hatred" to a "dreamer that cannot rest" and I love that development even within a small amount of text. The ending line is perfect, and gives closure to any thoughts and ideas I had through this poem.

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Thanks so much! I’m glad you enjoyed reading it!

[Locke Redwyne (night sy..]

In the first stanza, in the third line, commas after You and I might help improve the flow and understand-ability of the poem
Also in the first stanza, in the fourth line, did you mean I instead of is?
Besides that, I really like the content of the poem

[송지석 / Ji-Suk]

Oh thank you for your corrections! I appreciate it!