Soldier

“I’ll be right back, hold on, bebe..”

I send my heart across the seas
To a land I’ve never known,
And in it hope that you receive
A love only I have known.

Back at home, yes here, I stand
Alone and nearly broken,
But the promise keeps your heart at hand
And my body from being unwoven.

The tree we planted in the yard
It’s branches frigid and mangled,
Mother Nature has played her winter card
But in the summer it shall untangle.

I suspect your departure will take longer
Than your original statement
But maybe when the sun isn’t somber
We can let our love be blatant.

I pray you’re back by when you said
While it’s still cold out in the snow,
That way my cheeks stay warm and red
And you can scare away the crows.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Gee]

Like the content but the cadence is way off, repeating certain end words ain't good for me and at times you seem to be grasping for the rhyme.
Good morning Koiel

[Koiel]

I’ll edit it. I appreciate your review

[Koiel]

Would mind reviewing this piece again? I’ve edited it.

[hawthornemax]

This is very touching. Such an elegant piece you wrote.

[Koiel]

Thank you so so so so much. I love getting reviews, though I do not receive them often. Thank you so much, this means a lot