Live

Speak to the wind that howls and the water that raves,

Speak to the lonely and to that which braves.

Climb the mountains, shout your name,

Whisper with the forgotten, it's all the same.

A voice is what you need but if without

All you need to do is never doubt.

The world will hear you if you believe,

The world will see you if you achieve.

Run from battle but never fear,

Face it head on and jump the pier.

Raise your fist for what you think,

Don't let the croud pull you in to sink.

Chase the leader until you're in his spot;

Escape the law and don't ever get caught.

 

Reviews

[Mr. Lou]

hmmmm. Good poem, Ms. Kohleen. The rhyme scheme superb as always! But I must say that Ms. Kohleen you can do better. You must allow your imagination to create your words and enhance the experience you speak of! I need to feel exactly what this courage is you speak of! Tell me how I will Pierce through fear's brick walls, as I jump the pier! Think of a poem as a canvas and you must invent ideas like you would with paint! Go! WE ARE GODS ON PAPER! OUR DUTY IS TO CREATE!!!

[That_Guy]

that's a fun poem with great meaning behind it, well done

[Ian H Morrison]

nice really well written the usage of end rhyme is good the sentence structure is wonderfull and simply it is very very good

[Ryan Zeller]

I like the message behind the third and fourth lines, as well as the line "Chase the leader until you're in his spot," although I might change "chase" to "follow."

A few things I wanted to point out: I felt like five and six sounded a little clunky, and I thought that the rhyme in lines nine and ten sounded too forced. It seems like this imagery of a pier is only being used because it happens to rhyme with "fear." The best rhyming poetry convinces the reader that those words belong together.

[Freedom's Child]

Great motivational piece. "Run from battle but never fear" is great and very true. Good imagery that lets the reader use their imagination. Just me but I would change name to something like fears, worries, devils; but that's just me. Great work!