Young Summers

inspired by What Makes Us Girls by Lana Del Rey

Remember how we used to party up all night,

Running down the street in the dull gray light.

Drinking with the boys, laughing over senseless things;

Gave us their love and their football rings.

I said 'We're on top of the world girls,'

I said 'We ain't ever getting down girls.'

Smoking in the back alleys all over town.

Broke into the mall at night, never made a sound.

We got in trouble having too much fun,

The world was our target, we were the gun.

Summers came and summers went,

In the end we were all too far spent.

Now Jimmy's in the jail yard, Sarah's gone and died,

Danny's got three kids, I'm alone and all but cried.

Don't know when everybody left;

Lives spinning 'round like an endless cleft.

They were the only friends I ever had,

Guess I saw it all but the dark and the bad.

Reviews

[Crazy Cat Man]

this is a damn good poem and im glad to have finally made the time to read it. U described the perfect senseless paradise. everyone is letting their inhibitions go, the problem is that some of us don't know how to stop so some of us develop real problems when the partying is done. Some of us do drugs, or over drink alcohol. A lot of my peers from High School are burnt out @ 30 years old. its like they reached the peak of their life @ 14 years old, then its all down hill from there. which is tragic. Great piece in capturing those days in summer when i was young, when everyone was carefree :)

[Kohleen]

thanx for the review :D loved it!

[Crazy Cat Man]

no problem.....im just too buzy to constantly read everyone's poems :) so it takes awhile for me to respond....maybe even weeks :/

[Kohleen]

ha i know what you mean, there are a lot of writings on this site!

[Dani]

I absolutely love this poem. It perfectly describes that crazy, youthful spirit of a group of young friends, feeling like they have everything and that the fun is eternal. That naivety of young people, not realizing that wonderful time is going to end.

[That_Guy]

Fantastic write.

[Ian H Morrison]

oh gosh this i could really relate to all about how my friends have just dissapeared etc. But never mind that the poem is fantastic it rhymes well and the flow is fantastic . Your use of imagery is wonderful and every meter is an adventure