Chapter 10: New Girl

    My eyes flickered open for a moment or two before staying open completely, Looking over at the other side of the bed, Rose wasn't asleep yet. She looks and smiles before turning completely to me and stares. "Well, good thing your awake because I cant sleep." Sitting up in bed causes the covers to completely go off my upper body.
    "You shook me Rose." Starring at her doesn't seem to help just causes her mouth to drop in shock. She tries to speak against my finger pointing but my hand goes up interrupting her. "It's not a big deal I told you to." She looks away from me.
    "I just want to talk." She says while getting out of bed and pacing the room once again she must be nervous because the door is still stuck. "Like where did you go when you left?" Her eyes widened for a second waiting for an answer as quick as possible.
    "I just went places, I needed to get away." Rose acts frustrated, looking out the window rain was pouring now and the outside window is drenched.
    "Went where?" She said in anger almost but holding back as well.
    "Places." I sat there uncomfortable. 
    "Fine don't tell me...Why did you go?" She stopped pacing in anticipation for this answer.
    I looked at her then to the window again, but soon my eyes were everywhere in the room looking at the ceiling, door, and closet. "I left twice actually." This caused Rose to freeze in place, she put up two of her fingers and looked at me as I shook my head.
    "When was the second time." The subject was sore for me talking about it made me tense.
    "I came back here to take Susan, and that's what I did." Rose was in disbelief.
    "So she's alive." Rose says cheerfully. I shake my head, looking at the floor ashamed her smile fades to sadness then to confusion. "What happened?"
    I take a deep breath trying to calm my emotions."I was at work, she didn't know the city so she went out alone." I get up out of bed and look out the window anywhere but at Rose. "Someone kidnapped her, raped her and killed her." My fist pounds the wall as hard as possible. "It was my fault if I didn't take her she would be alive."
    "No, it's..." Rose tries to speak
    I turn and walk up to her close enough to touch her. "I knew the killer to, I thought he was a friend. So I found him, I had a revolver." I turn away once again back at the window, pulling out the revolver from my inside pocket of my jacket I throw it on the bed. A little scream comes from Roses mouth as she puts her hand over it.
    "I wanted him to suffer, because look at me." I turn and learn on the window the cold sensation crawls up and down my back. "I just got my sister back and it had been five years of just me and her." Tears started to fall down my cheek, taking a deep breath trying g to contain my sadness. "I thought she was safe, and then she was dead."
    "Listen Johnathan, It's not your fault." I shake my head.
    "We aren't talking about that, now that exact day she died apparently, I got the mail and saw both my parents were dead as well. After a month I was told my sister was found dead so I came back here." Rose just sat there and listened.
    "Now from what I heard the town has been haunted by a ghost of a little girl." I shake my head trying to figure it out. "It's not Susan, Susan only haunts my nightmares and dreams." I look at Rose who seems lost for words. "Who is she? I've seen her multiple times." I look at Rose who shrugs. "I bet you, the answer is in my house."
     I smell the air expecting the regular smell of this house but getting smoke and ash. I look at Rose who has smelled it by now. I run to the door but when trying to open the door my hand starts to burn. The door knob is scolding hot as I turn and walk away holding my hand.
    "God d****t." I say under my breath but low enough for Rose not to hear. Getting down on the ground I see under the door and see the eyes of my grandmother while she burns. The flames are close to the door about to enter the room. I shoot up and look at Rose, I walk passed her and open the window. "Out the window apparently." She looks at me like I'm nuts.
    "You cant be serious." Flames start to enter from under the door, I point at them.
    "It's either that or a hard fall." I say as Rose runs to the window and climbs out, she lets go of the frame and falls. preceding to follow her I hear the door start to open and a cold shiver goes up my spine despite the flames. I look behind me and see the little girl again, I bring my foot back in and turn to her forgetting about the fire.
    "Who are you?" The little girl turns her head as flames start to engulf her. I begin to walk to her as she steps back further into the flames.
    "Johnathan." I hear Rose yell from outside which breaks me from the little girls hold. Stopping, my foot almost in the flames I step back and shake the fire off my shoe. Running to the window I take one foot after the next and drop. Hitting the ground with much force I get up and look at the window once again and seeing her.
    "Who is she?" I whisper to myself.

Reviews

[Shep]

Very, very creepy. And so awesome. Please don't leave me hanging. Like I said I would read it all to the very last chapter. Moving on

[Daydreamer54]

I thought his sister commited suicide? man, that little girl is creppy. I wonder who she is as well...
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[Julie Beth]

Okay so at first iun the beginning of the chapter, i was taking Rose's side because Johnathan wouldn't answer her questions, but then he told her about what really happened to his siter and now i'm like, AHHH. My head just might explode because i didn't expect that to come out of his mouth.
You know what else i didn't expect? The ending! I mean when the said they smelt smoke i started freaking out but then he saw his grandmother and it's like oh my god! I feel so bad for Johnathan, his grandmother was the only real family he had left. Lastly, WHO THE HELL IS THIS LITTLE GIRL AND WHAT IS HER DEAL?!?!?! seriously i think this is my favorite chapter so far because i am pretty much at a loss of word and i seriously need to read on so i'm gonna stop typing and go and do that. I would say how awesome this chapter is but like i said, i'm at a loss of words and wouldn't know how to do that, pretend i'm giving you a thumbs up cause that was just amazing :D


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[Arianna]

I LOVE THIS CHAPTER. i love what you did with it and dare i say it...the paragraphs..WERE PERFECT :) (thank you) anyway onto content. HOLEY CANOLIES. haha this chapter was...creepy without being too scary and your doing a really good job of not letting too much of the story come out but letting enough to get people hooked. im glad you didnt kill rose, cause she is turning out to be a really good character. compared to the other chapters though jon seemed...sane, so you might want to tweek it a little just so that he seems a little more...i dont know Nutty :) i personaly found things read a little more psycho if the sentences are cut short almost like the brain doesnt have time to comprehend. just an idea. anyway it was really good. :) ROUND OF APPLAUSE :)

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