Chapter 9: Music Box

    Rain tapping on the roof followed by thunder that echos outside, I start to pick at the paint that still was on the box. Rose searches the room for something to pry the door open.I look out the window as the lightning causes the window to become a faint mirror and reflect my face back at me. When I see it the face in the window doesn't look like me, its almost as if it is me but it isn't me. This town is making me go insane, I don't even understand the stuff I think or say sometimes. I lay down  on the bed and look at the ceiling, I watching Roses shadow dance on it while she paces around frantically.
    The music box springs open spreading the music throughout the room as it bounces off the walls. I close it once again and lock it this time with the little key next to it. I don't bother taking the key out and let it just stay in the keyhole, I sit back up and open the drawer and look at the content inside. Some candle sticks, matches, one of the many bibles that are in this household, and a doll that was Susan's. She always brought the little doll everywhere, but she had lost it in the woods one day. My hand went over the mud stained face and the broken eye lid that didn't stay up on its own. Susan must had found it in the woods one day and brought it here, it was the only present she got from our mother and father.
    I place the doll back into the drawer and take the candle sticks out and put them in some holders that are on the desk already. I take the matches and slide one across the striking surface, The fire makes a yellowish orange light. The music box opens up again but this time causing me to jump, as the music plays the match falls to the floor. I stomp down on it as quick as possible and see the smoke escape from under my shoe. I take my foot off as I see the match has made a black mark on the wood floor that seems to be permanent.
    I look over at Rose who has stopped and it staring at the music box, I look at it as I slam it such again. I walk over to the window and slide it open, rain blows in getting the floor wet as I take the music box and chuck it outside. I watch as it lands in a puddle almost submerging it under water completely. I shut the window as water splashes onto me. "Stupid music box, Its so old it wont stay shut." I shake my head while I sit back down on the bed to relax.
    "Y-yea it's probably because it's old." Rose says nervously still pacing the room.
    "Look your going to start pulling your hair out if you keep getting this nervous." I light another match and light the candles to give the room some light. "Lets get some sleep." I lay down but I notice she hasn't moved I pat the empty side of the bed trying to get her to come over. "You need to sleep." She nods as she gets in to the bed, her body completely tensed up almost like a block of wood was trying to lay in the bed. "Relax I'm not going to do anything, and if you get to frightened then wake me up." She smiles a little as her body starts to relax.
"Goodnight." She whispers only because she cant get her voice any louder.
"Sleep well." I turn on my side facing the window, as I feel Roses hands wrap around me. I watch the rain pound the window as my eyes start to close and I am finally asleep.

Author's Note

Sorry for it being so short the next chapter is longer I promise this is more of a tiny filler.

Reviews

[Shep]

Not a problem, you will find that novels least the ones I read are always long and I perfer it that way.. I won't. Even buy a novel if is less than 350 pages. I perfer them over 700 or longer. After all I not buying a bedtime story, I am buying a novel. Very good so far didn't notice anything wrong here. Moving on.

[Daydreamer54]

I take my foot off as I see the match has made a black mark on the wood floor that seems to be permanent.
-I take my foot off and see the match has left a permamnet black mark on the floor. it probably still sounds wrong but thats my suggestion and i agree with julie beth about that house. *shudders* At least he's not there alone.
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[Julie Beth]

I would not be able to sleep in that house; i would be way to afraid. I liked what you did with the music box in this chapter; that thing is seriously creepy. Another thing i really liked about this chapter was how descriptive you were. The more descriptions you put in your chapters, the better they are; but alsop as Ana said, you do use I a lot in the descriptions. But it's nothing too big to worry about because it's an easy fix .This was a good one, keep up the good work. :)


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[Arianna]

well i like it.
just two things: YOUR PARAGRAPHS DRIVE ME CRAZY! to be 100% honest with you i look at paragraphs that long and want to run away and go to sleep.
and secondly. i feel like your trying to describe too many things with i before it. like i turn on my side i feel roses hand i light another match....and thats just what i get from the bottom part. it just gets a little repetative and you might want to try variations of this saying.
those points aside this was a nice little filler chapter.
odd but not too scary. and overall very ..filler-y. well done :) keep going. and tell me if im being too harsh...

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