Chapter 3: Johnny

    My eyes wont shut, as much as I want to sleep the uneasy feeling that I've had for the longest time is preventing it. My body stays frozen in bed, my eyes wont leave the window looking out to the night. It's a little bit after midnight and the rain starts fall, the sounds of drop after drop on the roof. The sound starts to echo in my head, the beat, and the sound isn't soothing me it makes me more afraid. I don't exactly know what I was thinking when I walked into town yesterday. In my wildest dreams would I never see them accepting me with open arms, but to hate me all of them, well most of them. I don't remember doing anything terrible but leave and that was the last time I spoke to anyone here.
    My house according to Rose was the reason everyone disliked me and that just did not seem fair. As Rose said they don't hate me but they are afraid of something and not even Rose the one that tole me wants to tell me why. The only thing I know is that it has something to do with my house. To figure it out I believe the only thing I can do to figure it out is go inside and find it, the reason. That's not something I can do at the moment I'm not ready to face the memories.
    My body is relaxed in the crippled state it's in, lying in the bed the weather keeps on changing outside rapidly. It's the middle of December so snow wasn't completely ridiculous, but it was very unlikely. While I look out the window stuck in my position it snowed for hours it seemed. There's a calming feeling that comes over me when I get the feeling back in my body. But the calming became fear when the sound of footsteps and whispers started beyond the rooms door. I pull the covers up over half my face, The footsteps get closer and the whispers are clearer.
    "Johnny, Johnny, Johnny." The sound seemed to pierce through the door and echo through the room bouncing off the walls. I struggle to get out of my bed but when I do I fall to the floor, scooting to the wall I hold my breath and complete silence takes the room by control. I look over at Roses bed to see that she is no longer occupying it, I use the desk in the corner of the room to help myself up. I start to walk towards the bathroom to splash some water on my face, as the whisper starts again but this time right outside the door. I walk towards the door as the whispers get more rapidly, I swing the door open with no sign of anyone. "Hello Johnny." Susan voice whispers into my ear.
    Light shines into my eyes as they open to the new day, the nightmares are all the same. I use to wake up in sweat or scream in terror, but that was when I first got the letter of Susan's disappearance. Since then a good night sleep is when I wake up before I see her. The Susan in my dreams because when I lay eyes on her the feeling of hate, sorrow, evil they all build inside. The whispers I can deal with and I have, The sight of her is what breaks me. I turn over in bed facing Rose's the covers are thrown over and the impression of someone being in it once is what was left. I sit up in bed and just study the blank room. Not really even looking though but mostly looking past it all, the only thing I can think of is how stepping into the house will feel. Terror is all I can remember when I left when I was eighteen.
    The door opens rapidly breaking me from my thoughts, It was Rose with a muffin in her hand. "Oh, um I didn't think you would be up." She looks ashamed for some reason. "Do you want something?" I think about it for a second and then graciously decline the offer because my appetite has not come to me yet. "Oh, well did you sleep well?" The thought of telling her the truth and telling her about Susan and everything but the thought goes away as quick as it came.

"Yes, I slept fine." Lieing seems so much easier, nobody wants to see whats going on with me everybody hates me here. I am all alone in this town now so the question came to my mind, why did I ever come back?

Reviews

[Julie Beth]

tole- told
Lieing- Lying
This was a good chapter. It makes me want to know more of his sister's disapparence, which is good because it makes me want to keep reading so i can find out. I'm not sure on my feelings about Rose. She seems nice and stuff but she is holding something back maybe. Great job :)

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[Shep]

Good question why did he come back? Has something to do with susans letter I am sure. Another good chapter. Again go back through and spend the time rereading. Moving on.

[Jake Donald Stephens]

I thought this was the best chapter so far. The pace slowing down was a good thing, taking us inside his head and letting us feel what he feels.
The part where he has the dream was well done, his terror very real until he wakes up, or was it really a dream the reader wonders?
And I also wonder what he will find in the old house when he finally goes back.
A great job of pulling the reader in with suspense and mystery.
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[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful chapter. I like the desire to find sleep and finding his sister in his dream. I like the opening thoughts of the day. Why did he return? Thank you for the excellent chapter.
Coyote

[Daydreamer54]

To figure it out I believe the only thing I can do to figure it out is go inside and find it, the reason. -The only way to figure it out was to go back to my childhood home.(That's a suggestion you could use because you kept repeating in the original.)
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[.quan.011.]

This is a big improvement and I happy to say I found nothing wrong with this chapter.
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[Arianna]

i like it.
doing a good job. im glad its longer :)
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