This Moment

One I will forget

Callogenically manipulated angel

screaming Zombie

in the karaoke mic

 

Smoking outside

on a cool marble slab

happy to be over it

instead of under it

 

The lines of paper

Remain obediant under my pen

A sure-fire sign

I haven't drank enough

 

My car sleeps

three spots left of me

taking for granted

I know my way home

Reviews

[zig]

ah, this is beautiful, very well done, well paced and consistant, and very haiku-ish. each stanza is like a little toy for my mind to play with. great moments. i liked the last one best, because i can put it together so many ways. as a whole i think it works because each moment always leads to snap the next moment and then snap another moment, snap snap snap... some really great snapshots here. zig

[Zatoichi]

callogenically manipulated? huh?

you're a good writer, other than the question above I like this poem. That 2nd line reeks of insecurity when in reality you're work here is rich in meaning but concise, qualities I greatly admire. Z

[Katherine Wyatt]

Really like this.. the last stanza is the clincher.. Marvelous write!

[Wildecat]

A delightful poem, reminds me of a few times at the local club and one to many beers. Nice write.

[Jason Henry]

a really fun poem...thanks for sharing

[Evans O Ogbebor]

lol, what a sweet a poem, was not quite sure where you were going, but the ending more than makes up for it.

[Robert Luna]

This truly paints a very interesting image in my head. This reminds me of my younger days when I would go to a certain cemetery to write and draw. I normally hate cemeteries to many thing there that effect me in ways. But there was this one I stumbled upon by accident when I was doing things i should not have. There was something so inviting about it. It was old the earliest headstone was from 1913. It was mostly cared for no weeds and the grass was always mowed. But all the headstones seemed to be embraced by the branches of the trees. Like if they were hugging them. Not sure way but any time I went there I was overcome with inspiration for something. I spent a lot of time there thinking and reevaluating my life and the paths I had taken. So in a way it was a safe place in my head a place I knew that felt like a home. Thanks for reminding me of those times.

This was wonderful.

Great JOb!!!!!!!