What I need you to Know

It speaks for itself

 

You awoke in terror                               

tiny lungs bleating my name                            

in the ambience of hopelessness.                          

Latent tears rested                                

Against your starlit eyes                               

I sang to you in earnest                           Close your eyes, sweet angel  

Your brother resting in my arms            Dream sweet dreams of your own         

I made my solemn promise                       Nothing here can harm you

You understood me                                     Nothing is set in stone

And bravely succumbed to sleep                 Rest now, and know this

                                   As summers pass and you grow 

                                            I will always be with you

                                            I will always love you so

Reviews

[zig]

ah, i see youre doing a little experiment, i love experiments. i like the side by side, great for doing: observation (reaction, justification, exclamation, etc) or to do comparision. i thought the left side could be a little stronger, maybe a little more focuesed on the terror of the nightmare, a little darker to make the right side even lighter, know what i mean? beautiful and soothing poem, thanks for sharing this with me. zig

[Cylis Derrens]

A wonderful and touching poem. It speaks of the love a parent has for a child, and the sweet haven they seek to offer in times of trouble and fear.

[Enigma]

I agree..It's so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeet!!!
The structure and the colors...whoa!!AWESOME or what???
I loved it.So full of love....
Gret Job!!!...and keep writing.

I like this piece. Its sweet! I love the structure and the two different colors. I thought this was very good piece of poetry!