The Sun has Gone and So have I

It's getting late

take me home

my mind is slowly

dying from all the

thoughts it's supplying

 

The sun has gone

and so should I

so say good bye

I gotta fly

 

I'll be back I promise

you that but for now

please don't look back

 

The sun is up and

so am I and I didn't

tell a lie for here

I am coming by

 

Did you miss me

while I was away?

If so that is okay

I missed you too

Reviews

[XxKooperxX]

I like it :) it isn't bad. not at all.

[Poison Ivy]

quickly written for sure, but some of the best often are. nice )

[Tai Ryens]

Err . . . To be honest, it isn't your best. Though, you should keep this in mind for revising and improving in the future.

[K-mo]

what would you suggest needs improvement?

[Tai Ryens]

Why, I haven't a clue to suggestions of revising. The lines feel a bit . . . off, or rather different than your usual get-up.

[K-mo]

yeah I can see the iffyness of this piece

[R.O.M.E.T.S.I.]

Reminds me of someone. I liked it, simple and sweet.

[That_Girl]

Nice analogy here. :) It's a sweet poem. I enjoyed it!

[K-mo]

Thanks!