Midnight Thoughts

Midnight Thoughts

A Poem by Kiwi.jh

I lay awake at night.

Staring at the celling engulfed in darkness,

a single tear runs along my cheek.

I argue with myself, 

About how I could be different

Twisting and turning on the springs in the mattress.

I wonder, am I okay?

I stare now, at the wall.

My eyes dry, my heart heavy, and my soul crushed.

I lay awake at night.

© 2017 Kiwi.jh


Author's Note

Kiwi.jh
Please give me tips, I'm quite young and I love writing, but I don't really know where or how to start.

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I like this. It feels genuine and introspective. Honest and open, when writing, is key to connecting with readers. You claim youth, for not knowing how and where to start. Although when young our experience may be in the shallow end of the pool, we are able to observe and analyze those who go deep. Inspiration surrounds us. It is in the things that make us wonder and feel the heart of others. What others feel, they try to disguise. Learn to see behind their masks. After writing a piece, use a thesaurus to discover words that enrich the subtleties of your intent. Honest, open, feelings connect you to readers. Yet remember to never strip yourself naked and empty. Leave some things unsaid, only hinting so the individual reader is able to insert themselves between your words. Everything else is just smoke and mirrors for finesse.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kiwi.jh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your feedback. This is some amazing advice, I will try and use it in my future.. read more
VALORMORE DE PLUME

6 Years Ago

What is the use of writing, if it means nothing? Many of my poems are about 'poetic mindset' as oppo.. read more



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Posted 2 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You're really good at writing poems.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Kiwi.jh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Kiwi.jh

6 Years Ago

By the way I'm reading your book right now, and I really like it. Very interesting and entertaining... read more
Locke Redwyne (night sys)

6 Years Ago

Thanks! It's not amazing at the beginning, but trust me, it gets better (except for Jay, she's not m.. read more
You don't need tips , you write beautifully

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kiwi.jh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
I like this. It feels genuine and introspective. Honest and open, when writing, is key to connecting with readers. You claim youth, for not knowing how and where to start. Although when young our experience may be in the shallow end of the pool, we are able to observe and analyze those who go deep. Inspiration surrounds us. It is in the things that make us wonder and feel the heart of others. What others feel, they try to disguise. Learn to see behind their masks. After writing a piece, use a thesaurus to discover words that enrich the subtleties of your intent. Honest, open, feelings connect you to readers. Yet remember to never strip yourself naked and empty. Leave some things unsaid, only hinting so the individual reader is able to insert themselves between your words. Everything else is just smoke and mirrors for finesse.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kiwi.jh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your feedback. This is some amazing advice, I will try and use it in my future.. read more
VALORMORE DE PLUME

6 Years Ago

What is the use of writing, if it means nothing? Many of my poems are about 'poetic mindset' as oppo.. read more
You've made great start. This is lovely and I'm sure many of us have been in the same place in the midnight hour so can relate to your words.
Keep going.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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