Hold me

Life throws you challenges and the storm is strong but don't let go of me.

Love is pure and kind

It makes my heart boom

Oh, will you stay with me tonight

The air is thin but I can still breathe

Forever with your mouth on me

Our love is my home

It's the one thing I know

The storm is violent but you hold me tight

I know I have to face the storm outside

But, will you please just hold me tonight

Reviews

[closed]

holding on to something is often a salve to move us from day to day
with our pens we forge that possibility, moving from yesterday into tomorrow



-Dream

[Kittyskittles]

exactly! Thank you.

[Perkele.7885]

This is a nice poem describing what you need too ease through the night!
Line#4 breath(e)
Line#3 Oh, comma
Line#4 but, comma (will?)
Line#8 but, comma (will?)
Line#10 But, comma
Once again, I like the poem but, some grammar is always required

[Kittyskittles]

Thank you so much for the comments and the grammar help!!! I edited it and applied the chances. So again thank you. My grammar is not the best

[Perkele.7885]

I think you missed on your editing dear, please check periods are not commas and the other suggestions

[Kittyskittles]

Oh, I hit the wrong button in a rush. My bad