Waiting
A Poem by
KittyStarr1101
Meow
He sits in this room, With melancholy tears.
It is his fifth birthday,
But no one comes.
He wants his mom to hold him.
But she can't be found.
Ten years later,
He is still waiting for his birthday.
To him,
He is still five.
So he allows the lies to adorn him,
Swallowing him whole.
He is waiting.
Will you come?
© 2011 KittyStarr1101
Author's Note
Well, I decided to do a boy for you guys out there.
Reviews
So sad. :/
Posted 12 Years Ago
so sad. seems almost like you have a little story developing, at minimum you have written an inspiration for one.
Posted 13 Years Ago
so sad. seems almost like you have a little story developing, at minimum you have written an inspiration for one.
I really liked this one! A lot. The question at the end is just perfect.
Posted 13 Years Ago
I really liked this one! A lot. The question at the end is just perfect.
Captures melancholic emotions so nicely here, great work :)
Posted 13 Years Ago
Captures melancholic emotions so nicely here, great work :)
this is such a sad, but well-flowing story in here.
Posted 13 Years Ago
this is such a sad, but well-flowing story in here.
Really, really sad. Someone open his eyes! The longer you believe on something and then find out that it was actually wrong, the greater is the pain that it will bring. Liked it. Keep on writing! ;)
Posted 13 Years Ago
Really, really sad. Someone open his eyes! The longer you believe on something and then find out that it was actually wrong, the greater is the pain that it will bring. Liked it. Keep on writing! ;)
Awwh this is soo sad . .its a good write though.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Awwh this is soo sad . .its a good write though.
Goodness, makes me want to pick up that kid and give him a big squeeze.
I think we should throw him a party. ;)
Posted 13 Years Ago
Goodness, makes me want to pick up that kid and give him a big squeeze.
I think we should throw him a party. ;)
Awww this was so sad.
And at the same time, I almost felt like the end was a little haunting.
Nice write!
Posted 13 Years Ago
Awww this was so sad.
And at the same time, I almost felt like the end was a little haunting.
Nice write!
Sweet and sad at the same time. Wonderful job! (And I would come, by the way ;))
Posted 13 Years Ago
Sweet and sad at the same time. Wonderful job! (And I would come, by the way ;))
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Added on November 22, 2011
Last Updated on November 23, 2011
Tags:
death ,
love ,
melancholy ,
forlorn ,
sad ,
emo ,
goth ,
walls ,
home ,
house ,
domons ,
possesion ,
paranormal ,
religion
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KittyStarr1101 Bikini Bottom, IL
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I am 12, quite enjoy writing. I have a Kitty soul so therefore ; I am a kitty. I know what your thinking - but, you look like a human - well I have a Kitty soul trapped in a human body. I attend Churc..
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