Losing Yourself

When your head is just above water

You can feel the waves lapping against your 

Face 

Your body's tired 

Under 

Under 

And you tell yourself you'll come up for

Air

Sinking deeper 

And darker 

The pressure is 

Suffocating. 

The water has its tight grip 

Around your neck

And you remember 

That you should've come up for air 

A long time ago. 

Reviews

[M]

this is a perfect representation of how it feels to lose yourself. love this. good job :)

[Carly]

I feel like I can relate to a lot of your writing, you do a really good job of writing about feelings and hardships. I can tell you have had some struggles. I hope writing has helped you through. Keep it up :)

[Kirsty Woodward]

Thank you Carly, & for the reviews. All lovely words.

[barleygirl]

First, let me suggest that the title might be "Losing Yourself" (with a single "o")???

I really like this description of how it feels when life is insurmountable. I felt this way after neck surgery left me unable to walk & it took me two years to walk again, & even then, not for very long each day. Just trying to do the most ordinary things was almost too much every day. You've captured this feeling, using simple imagery, rather than telling a dramatic story about it. Nice job!

[Kirsty Woodward]

Ahh thank you for pointing that out haha. Sorted.

& I'm glad you relate, thank you for the review.

[Inject Positivity]

Very cleverly done! This is how we do things in our life, we put ourselves in difficult situations without knowing the different aspects of it and when we do not see a way out then we realize "oh we should have think about it before entering here"... Very well thought out piece, and you left a thought to think here for the reader...

Regards
Dhiman

[Kirsty Woodward]

Thank you Dhiman. This is a common trait in our human nature but I feel good can always come out of bad situations.

[Inject Positivity]

Very true, there is always good in everything no matter how bad the situation may seem...

[JMaster1]

your words are so real , you can describe so much with so little words

[David Scott]

Well, I'm heading off on a scuba diving trip next week... I hope the read was not prophetic. Ha.
A great capture of how it feels to loose ones grasp of their own person...

[Kirsty Woodward]

I hope your trip was nothing like this poem David.

Thanks for the comment.