Hourglass.

potential lyrics.

He turned his eyes away

And spoke through the wall to me.

“Get it together” he thinks,

I can see it in his face.

I can see it cross his mind,

‘Cause I can read him most of the time,

But the words to follow

Are bitter pills to swallow…

 

“I am tired,” he says.

“I am tired

Of chasing my own tail,

I’m running in circles with you.

I’m running in circles

And we are doomed to fail

…and I love you,

But I’m tired of you.”

 

Won’t someone knock that hourglass

On it’s side?

No, I don’t want to break it,

Just to buy me a little time

Because the sand as it flows

I feel it aging my young bones

And by the time that he stops speaking,

I’ll be gone.

 

Reviews

[Lyr J. Thirsk]

kiri j,
how you say what you say, there isnt vocabulary for it...its very good.

'im tired of you' .....the 'at-a-loss' and fatigable feeling in how u present this simple line in its context is what makes it work so well, and for me...the whole of the verses revolves around this line and its idea...but the parodox of wishing time would stop for a while until this guy shuts his mouth and kisses you like he should is perfectly presented in the image of a tipped over hourglass...DAMN thats good!

you know whats great about this poem or verses as it were,
it is raw and real. rending and moodly and savage but pleading.

the content excrutiates, but it is lyrical...so that it is musicv makes it pierce ever the more.

i love it.

jake

[Edward Clay]

"No, I don't want to break it,
Just to buy me a little time
Because the sand as it flows
I feel it aging my young bones"

i can feel the rhythm and melody in this final stanza - it feels almost in place. it could be strong and powerful, but with the same impact if it was soft, slow, gentle.

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

great write! :)

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

Interesting. I like the wording used here. I don't know how the song would go but I like the idea of it being lyrics. I am a songwriter myself.
Thank you for sharing.
Love All,
Mejasha