A Doctor's Fight

The rain spattered against the big windows,
hard and cruel.
Thunder's deep laugh boomed
and heralded the arrival
of what I dreaded the most
for him,
Death.
The dark robed witch
glided quietly,
as nature's forces guided it,
nearer and nearer to him.
But I stood firm..
The Soldier of Life,
The Guardian of Hope.

He looked up at me.
His eyes a mosaic
of pain, of hurt, of loss.
He was not my father,
or my brother.
He was neither my friend,
nor my lover.
But I worshiped him,
for he was my patient.
I respected him like my father,
protected him like my brother,
cared for him like my friend,
and loved him like my lover.

His hand tightly clasped in mine,
he breathed in relief,
as with me his life lay.
With God on my side,
I took up the fight
and unsheathed my sword of knowledge.
My each move calculated,
I struck, dodged and struck again.

Thunder let out a final cry,
as the witch receded away.
The seven colored flag of Victory
waved in the sky,
as sun smiled upon
the Life I'd just saved.

Author's Note

I've tried to portray the nobility of a doctor. Please let me know if I've managed to convey the right message.

Reviews

[Salar Majak]

no you didn't manage to portray it, i'm sorry
YOU MASTERED IT!!!!!
this is my favorite poem of the day
beautiful noble emotions!
wow girl!!!! you have an amazing talent!!!!
beautiful!!!

Thunder let out a final cry,
as the witch receded away.
The seven colored flag of Victory
waved in the sky,
as sun smiled upon
the Life I'd just saved.

i mean seriously, with an imagination like yours, you can rule the universe!
beautiful poem
great job Poet!!

[Zoya Sahai]

Thank you soo much!!!! :) :) :)

[Salar Majak]

you are very welcome :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Great poem. You portrayed an epic battle giving this piece the validity it deserves. The battle with death is as strenuous and spiritually exhausting as anything on the battlefield although I can not fathom a doctor loving a patient as a lover. This doesn't make sense. Wouldn't this cross an ethical line?

[Zoya Sahai]

I appreciate your kind review Sir. And regarding the ethical line, ethics come into play when the doctor commits a blunder and fails to do his duty of service to humanity. The love of a doctor towards his patient, is taken in a controversial manner, but a doctor who works for his patients' lives sincerely, loves them enough to fight for them.

[Michael G. Smith]

I understand this my son is a doctor but, to love your patient as a lover? Unless it's a metaphor regarding a love beyond normal depths?

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This has a scene fit of an emergency room...A lot of doctors in my family...and the stories my uncle tell me of their work is incredible...and to them its a normal event...and to us a shock of awe...

[Zoya Sahai]

It does actually fit that, when a doctor shoulders the burden of somebody's life. I am still in the process of learning how to do it, but it is incredible, as you describe it. Thanks!!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...seems my comment got put below in Aurora's review...

[Inda]

Yiu did a great a job, my only complaint is, "big window", that's just because i don't think you need the word big in there, other than that this is fantastic! Original too, which is hard to come by these days.

[Dr. Wood ?]

ah if only all doctors were like you......

[Zoya Sahai]

Thank you so much Dr. Wood! It means a lot!! :)

[Sherlock]

awesome poem !!! really good keep it up nice idea

[Karen]

You indeed portrayed the nobility of a doctor, and so much more about your writing style and precision. This poem is not only beautiful in its portrayal, but it's creative and original. I truly enjoyed reading it!

[Shivam Murari]

So picturesque and so noble, Zoya, this is one Poem Of The Day (must have been the day it was released). The idea is all clear in your head and not just put in some random manner. You have penned the superbly clean ideas in with utter perfection. Really nice. :-)

[Zoya Sahai]

Thank you so much Shivam! :)

[Shivam Murari]

:)

[Pranav Malhotra]

very few people get the privilege of bringing back people from the shackles of death.
I am proud you had an opportunity to fight that fight

[Hotwater]

It's a top draw!

*bird*

[carol burgess romance]

I so love this...working as a caregiver for many years I can see this played out. Wonderful drama, great read.