My love

My knees start to weaken
At the first sight of your face
My heart starts to melt
At the thought of your embrace

Your love flows through me
Like a river flows down its path
Your kiss lifts me up so high
I could probably fall to my death

I really wish that
When I looked into your eyes I could see
Exactly how

You feel about me.

I get nervous when you're around me
I could cry when you're away
I dream about you
Every night and every day

I want you to know

That I will always love you

For you have loved me

I know its true

My last three words to you

Will always remain true
Regardless of what I do to you
You'll always know that
I love you.

Author's Note

Sorry If the poem is bad, I wrote it when I was 7 which was 10 years ago. I am trying to make it better without rewriting it. After im done working on it I might turn it into a song if I have time to mess around with my guitar. Made it a litle better I guess so comment peeps.

Reviews

[Kate]

I cannot believe you wrote this at seven years of age. It was lovely and extremely well-done.

[Jessica Mai]

This is beautiful. I really enjoyed this.

[alesuriko]

Nicely written, good flow and rhythm. The structure could use a little work but otherwise it's very expressive and emotional. I enjoyed the first stanza the most and the imagery in the second stanza is rather nice. Those are my favorite parts of this poem I think, it's mainly after those two that structure begins to weaken.