"Walk alone"

 Rain dancing on top of my head

Like salt being rubbed in wounds

The clouds gather closer

Darkening by the hour

Thunder roaring and speaking out

As lighting streaks through moist air

Striking my body sending jolts on through

Coursing through the nerves

Immobilizing the senses

Buckling the knees

Slumping to the ground

Giving up all hope

Just laying face down

As the rain cloaks the tears

Tears shed and forgotten

Tears cried and never answered

Body charred and heart dying

Remnants fading of everything that was

The greedy soil soaks up the last teardrop

Leaving no remains

Of he who clung to despair

And never clung to hope

Reviews

[Gandré]

This was beautiful. Natural rhyme, fantastic.

[angelina neves]

beautifully expression of emotions

[sarah]

wow this is amazing:)
i love itt!

[Gathering_Stars]

"rain dancing on top of my head like salt being rubbed in the wounds".....I like this a lot. I might change dancing to pounding simply because of the message you are trying to convey. Overall a great piece!

[Lauren Beth]

I really liked this piece...full of real emotion. I can definately relate...I especially like the lines "Tears shed and forgotten Tears cried and never answered" I totally get it, and can feel it. Great write!

[taylor lynn gallo]

really good(=
i love yur poems.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A great relative experience piece, I think we all feel this way sometimes. I have a comparitive piece as well entitled The Missing with the same concept but from a different approach.

[John A Common]

Whew man,thats great stuff. Your writing style is somewhat like my own,so needless to say I think its genius. I have been there in the rain feeling that way so many times myself. Very good work buddy.