Fire and Rain

Inspired by the James Taylor song of the same title.

I've seen Fire and
I've seen Rain...
You've had sunny days
That I wished would never end...

I've seen you hold your ground like Earth.
I've heard you yell and scream like Wind.
I've watched your tears pour down like Water.
I've seen you show burning passion like Fire.

I've seen Fire and
I've seen Rain...
You've had sunny days
That I wished would never end...

I've watched as you slipped through my grasp like Water.
I've felt you blow by me like the Wind.
I've seen your hatred for me burn like Fire.
I've seen you knock me to the Earth.

I've seen Fire and
I've seen Rain...
You've had sunny days
That I wished would never end...

You're just like the Elements...
Encased in human form...
But I don't know which you'll be...
And I don't want to cause you harm...

I've seen Fire and
I've seen Rain...
You've had sunny days
That I wished would never end...

I feel the Fire burning through me...
I feel the Water in my eyes...
I feel the Wind leaving me...
Lay me in the Earth, I've died inside...

I've seen Fire and
I've seen Rain...
You've had sunny days
That I hoped would never end...

Author's Note

Inspired by "Fire and Rain" by James Taylor

Reviews

[Rasputin]

Honestly, I'm not sure what you were trying to get at here. It's not that I don't like it, but it's very vague. I know it's inspired by some James Taylor song. I don't listen to James Taylor, so I'm not familiar with his body of work. But I think he stole that whole "Earth, Wind, Water, and Fire" thing from Captain Planet.

[Alex Vidmar]

I have to be honest with you, I didn't steal that from Captain Planet at all. And he wrote the original "Fire and Rain" after a friend's suicide.

[Mike]

Truly a beautiful peace

[Layla J Omorose]

I loved this poem. The elements ever changing just like emotions. love can turn to hate so easily. This actually reminded me of a song but I can't remember the name of it. I feel this would be a great song as well. Beautifully written.

[MandaBear]

very clever poem. Its cool how you used the elements in this poem. i cant pick my favorite part because it is all my favorite. well done!!

[.....]

Okay, a couple of critiques and suggestions, for each stanza, start out with one I, or I've and drop the rest, that kind of repetition is just tedious and adds nothing to the poem. Also stanza 2 and stanza 4 are very, very similar, you may want to find different words for each of those to change it up again. Other than that. I like the idea of this, what you were trying to convey. There is some imagery there, and your refrain holds well throughout the poem.

I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

Blessings, Tammy

[Tarry Franck]

You're just like the Elements...
Encased in human form...
But I don't know which you'll be...
And I don't want to cause you harm...

Love this verse of the poem. The whole poem is great and really speaks to me.

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

Deep and touching. I don't know If I understand the full meaning of it because it really goes deep, but I liked it very much!

[Ragin Cajun]

Great job, I really like your work. Keep it up.

[Celestrial-Demon]

wow that inspire ring i love it also it reminds me of the 4 elements

[Blindfolded]

Very creative in the way you linked the song and your writing together. I enjoyed reading about your emotion and passion in here.

[quixotic_rose]

I find myself loving this. It makes me feel all laid back and chill, if that makes any sense to you. An inspiring poem :)