המלח בביוב

המלח בביוב

A Chapter by Alex Vidmar

עו'רים "רך תעלות "'יו',
'תקוו" ל"ימלט
נ'וע תל א'י'.
של"ם "'ית", "רוס.

עם זאת, "ם לא מ'ינים
כי "ם לא ל'"
'רשת "מ-תרת של"ם
של צינורות, -ול"ות, ו-ומר צוא".

מ" "ם יו"עים,
"וא ש"ם מתים.
"מל- ''יו'.


© 2012 Alex Vidmar


Author's Note

Alex Vidmar
Translated to Hebrew with Google Translate.

Dead in the Sewers

They walk through the sewers,
Hoping to escape
An infected Tel Aviv.
Their home, devastated.

However, they do not realise
That they are not alone
In their underground network
Of pipes, rats, and fecal matter.

Little do they know,
Is that they're are Dead.
Dead in the Sewers.

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I agree with Rebecca down there, the "they're are" kinda just twisted my tongue. Eh, and there's really no place to hide... -.-" Just like in HOTD..they were basically everywere .. It's kinda scary to think of; especially if I was in the sewers...well long story short I'm not the type to stay in dark places in a calm state for awhile.. Like the vibe in this poem though :)

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I agree with Rebecca down there, the "they're are" kinda just twisted my tongue. Eh, and there's really no place to hide... -.-" Just like in HOTD..they were basically everywere .. It's kinda scary to think of; especially if I was in the sewers...well long story short I'm not the type to stay in dark places in a calm state for awhile.. Like the vibe in this poem though :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good. Just wanted to say "they're are" just doesn't...go. Either "they are" or just "they're". Otherwise, great!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

First of all.... HEBREW IS COOL! Secondly, this is very mysterious and scary. I can imagine people walking through sewers and walkers following them silently, only to leap out and bite them when they least expect it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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That's not How Hebrew should look like, it's not read-able... But, just to make it clear, you got the title wrong.
The writing itself is Beautiful, as always.

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