Surrounded

They're all around this hovel,
My only weapon, a beat-up shovel.
Adrenaline rushing, veins pulsing,
I close my eyes and sing.

I sing the song my daughters loved,
And the song to which my wife and I were wed.
They are all sick with this diabolical killer.
After I killed them, they were buried under a fiery pillar.

I kiss my wedding band and the necklaces my
Daughters made for me.
Take a deep breath, calm my nerves.
I drop my weapon and to the heavens my eyes curve.

The doorknob, I turn; they pour on in.
And their teeth tear away at my bare skin.
I just smile and think, with tears in my eyes.
"I'm coming girls, wait for me at the gates, and tell mommy I say, 'Hi.'"

Reviews

Печально, но это случается часто, как это ... Вы указы аете это так хорошо! Я с нетерпением жду, чтобы узнать больше о аших гла !

Е.Л.

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:( that's sad *sighs* well if you can't beat'em - join'em basiclly ll that you can do at this point of time, poor dude though!

[Pikachu]

Poor man. Lovely way of putting his death.

"And their teeth tear away at my bare skin.
"I just smile and think, with tears in my eyes.
" 'I'm coming girls, wait for me at the gates, and tell mommy I say, Hi."

Wonderful!

[Mockingbird]

shows the love a man has for his family and how he can't live without them. he sees his inevitable demise, and welcomes it to be reunited with his family.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and I like the wide open ending. A powerful poem with a hard punch. A excellent chapter.
Coyote

[Roe]

Wow this is awesome it's sad that he died thought but I think it puts a nice touch on the ending

[Wren]

Wow, thsi is very emotive. It is sad that he died though. A nice addition to the story.

[Your Perfect Disaster]

This is so sad but yet so genuine D':
It expressed so much in such a little amount of time.
Wonderful job.

[Alex Vidmar]

This book is beng written in poetry form using multiple views from different people.

[Sahar moonlight]

he died?? i didnt expect this, not on second chapter at least.
thinking( whats going on in the other chapters??)

[CrimsonBlaze]

Aw, he died....Well, after all once one loses his/her family, you wanna give up on life. I like how you didn't mention the word "zombie" even once! I liked how you formatted it in a poem like way and there seems to be no errors whatsoever. Well nice start, and one thing for sure, I'm continuing this! -is a clear lover of zombie stories- :)