Surrounded

Surrounded

A Chapter by Alex Vidmar

They're all around this hovel,
My only weapon, a beat-up shovel.
Adrenaline rushing, veins pulsing,
I close my eyes and sing.

I sing the song my daughters loved,
And the song to which my wife and I were wed.
They are all sick with this diabolical killer.
After I killed them, they were buried under a fiery pillar.

I kiss my wedding band and the necklaces my
Daughters made for me.
Take a deep breath, calm my nerves.
I drop my weapon and to the heavens my eyes curve.

The doorknob, I turn; they pour on in.
And their teeth tear away at my bare skin.
I just smile and think, with tears in my eyes.
"I'm coming girls, wait for me at the gates, and tell mommy I say, 'Hi.'"


© 2012 Alex Vidmar


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Печально, но это случается часто, как это ... Вы указы аете это так хорошо! Я с нетерпением жду, чтобы узнать больше о аших гла !

Е.Л.

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Dark , poignant good write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aw! How sad! Really good. It shows the stress the survivors are dealing with and how bad the situation really is for them.

Posted 12 Years Ago


So sad. You definitely have an eye for the dark side.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That one was pretty sad yet I completely understand the character and his pain even though this one entry was short but straight to the point.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Actuallly I don't know why but I probably would have been the one to want to become a zombie. I don't know, I'm odd like that. Still you have great rhyming skills.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. I am hooked!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Only three chapters in and I'm already in love with this book. The last two lines are so touchingly tragic, if that makes any sense. It's so sad that he dies!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Печально, но это случается часто, как это ... Вы указы аете это так хорошо! Я с нетерпением жду, чтобы узнать больше о аших гла !

Е.Л.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sadness i wish he didn't die but that was a lovely way of describing his death

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww :( but good job. I like how your writing the chapters in those kinds of stanzas

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Alex Vidmar

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