Through These Eyes

I see things...
Spirits, hatred, love, anger.
People, animals, safety, and danger.
I see these things.

I've seen,
Death, Life, Sadness, pain.
Fire, earth, wind, and rain.
These things I've seen.

I want to see...
The face of a newborn, the smile of a lover,
Happiness throughout the world,  And a world without hunger.
These I want to see.

I will never see...
A world without pain, nor the year 3000.
The smile of one long gone, nor the face of my great-great-great-granddaughter's husband.
These, I shall never see.

Author's Note

Just wrote this in 5 minutes. What'd'ya think?

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

For five minutes, this is exceptionally done. I've really never thought about not seeing the year 3000 or my descendants fiancees, but you're absolutely correct. The only thing I have to say critique-wise is just that it doesn't seem finished, almost as if there's something important you're missing. Good job though!

[Marie]

I think it's very good...you said such a lot in such a short time.

[olla]

nicely done.. some times the words just flow..

[Mockingbird]

expresses sadness and despair. great job.

[Owlgirl]

Wow! This is excellent! It has such depth and meaning, it's amazing!

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Interesting. I like it :) Great work!

[MOON]

Very good write, gives you that sixth sense feeling

[Alexa Tasch]

Very nice! I live how you look at it from the present, past and future. It flows very well too. Great poem! :)

[Alex Vidmar]

Thanks :)

[Alexa Tasch]

no problem!!

[Alex Vidmar]

Haha :P

[Alexa Tasch]

:P

[Alex Vidmar]

message me.

[Alexa Tasch]

ok

[Abbie]

hmmm, very nice. IT flows great and the rhyming fits perfectly. Fantastic! :D