Through These Eyes

I see things...
Spirits, hatred, love, anger.
People, animals, safety, and danger.
I see these things.

I've seen,
Death, Life, Sadness, pain.
Fire, earth, wind, and rain.
These things I've seen.

I want to see...
The face of a newborn, the smile of a lover,
Happiness throughout the world,  And a world without hunger.
These I want to see.

I will never see...
A world without pain, nor the year 3000.
The smile of one long gone, nor the face of my great-great-great-granddaughter's husband.
These, I shall never see.

Author's Note

Just wrote this in 5 minutes. What'd'ya think?

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

For five minutes, this is exceptionally done. I've really never thought about not seeing the year 3000 or my descendants fiancees, but you're absolutely correct. The only thing I have to say critique-wise is just that it doesn't seem finished, almost as if there's something important you're missing. Good job though!

[Clare the Artist]

cool. rhyme

[lee von cleef]

Like the pace ,I went fast , Think it needs a anchor at the end to make the reader slow down and re focus on what you want.

[words of rooted design]

These four stanzas blend fabulously. Truly enjoyed this.

[Alex Vidmar]

thank you.

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

Amazing! It is a happy but also a sad poem, and it worked really well. Great job, keep at the good work!

-Urosh Stojanovic

[To be scene To be heard..]

wow i love this very sweet write

[Dr. Wood ?]

the instantly written ones are often the best...sometimes you cannot write fast enough can you? I loved this

[Laura Storm]

I like it. It's simple and sweet. good write

[Rhea752]

it addressed the issues of the world and what we should be seeing instead of things like the aforementioned. great poem i really enjoyed it!!!!

[Alex Vidmar]

Wow. I never actually looked at it that way. Thank you :)

[that-little-green-monst..]

I like the flow of this poem. Wonderful job!

[Sahar moonlight]

That's a great write Alex! Happy to read for you after a long time, and I absolutely read a wonderful poem

[Alex Vidmar]

Merci tres beaucoup Natty :) so nice to hear from you! It's been so long!