Walk with me
let me set you free
let me show you
the pettiness you're condemned to see
spread your wings
go ahead and fly
open your mouth and sing
to this injustice called "Life"
Your right, we condemn ourselves when we follow words that look only on injustices of life and it's trials.
We must learn to over look so much of the pettiness and negativity otherwise we are just flapping our wings.
The style does not have rhyming words.But, when I was reading your work, it felt like the words were closely connected with each other giving an illusion of rhyming. That's a wise work,no doubt.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you, truth be told it took a while to string those words together...i think that might be why... read moreThank you, truth be told it took a while to string those words together...i think that might be why. Thank you for your kind words I'm really glad you enjoyed it😃😃😃
Life is a blinding thing, so mundane and clouded. If our eyes could be opened to the truth, then it would be beautiful, but that is unlikely to happen anytime soon.
Very powerful poem, I love it and, as always, look forward to reading more!
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for your kind words again. I'm very glad you read and I ask look forward to reading some m.. read moreThank you for your kind words again. I'm very glad you read and I ask look forward to reading some more of your writing
Your right, we condemn ourselves when we follow words that look only on injustices of life and it's trials.
We must learn to over look so much of the pettiness and negativity otherwise we are just flapping our wings.
I'm a simple person normally the quiet person in the room. My thing is honesty... Trust and we're great. Where I'm from trust is all you have.
I love to write and I love to read.
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