Math?

hope you like it :)

You’ve given up on numbers

Hated the sign

Cursed the equation

And denied the problems

Yet you never realize 

That math has thought you

The things that you thought 

That you’ll never know

Math made you hunt 

For the value of X

And it may sound stupid 

But you never questioned Y

Math made you spent your money

On nonsense things 

Like buy 60 watermelons

And knowing why

So get up and get ready

For math has more to offer 

Than to buy 60 watermelons

And hunting for the value of X

Author's Note

this is actually my project in math

Reviews

[Irenic]

A very cool poem, after reading so many poems on sadness, your poem literally curved my lips upward.
Thanks for sharing :)

[C_theSurrealist]

I love the line " 60 watermelons ", that is a very witty description of nonsense things. I love mathematics, and I found your poem great and well-said. Math is everything and beautiful I know. Keep writing!

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe everything is math is a sense. Good uses and bad uses for numbers and equations. I enjoyed your thoughts and you left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Johnny]

Hey very original... I like it... It's very cute

[BlakHeart]

Thank you very much ^^

[raven]

math i believe is more about developing the process of figuring them out. numbers are just that. nice work.

did you get an A? hope you did

[BlakHeart]

I hope I get some :)

[Nwang]

Had trouble with math when I was a kid, but in love with numbers now. Cool poem, different approach.
I shared your viewpoint a long time ago.

[BlakHeart]

Thabk you so much ^^ I really appreciate it ^^o

[JayG]

• You’ve given up on numbers

But I haven't, so from line one I react negatively, as will anyone who hasn't. And why begin a poem by alienating everyone who sees the value of math?

Instead of dwelling on the negative, why not a poem that shows the virtues of knowledge, and does so in a way that makes the reader wish they'd said it so well? Remember, in the end, your reader is with you for entertainment.

[BlakHeart]

This is my project in mathematics and as I see my classmates and the students around me, the hate math, in fact they curse math, so I got the idea from that

[JayG]

• as I see my classmates and the students around me,

Yes, but this is YOUR reaction, and most meaningful to you. But readers are self-centered, and seeking something that will make THEM react, not say, "Uh-huh."

“Good writing is supposed to evoke sensation in the reader, not the fact that it’s raining, but the feeling of being rained upon.”
~ E. L. Doctorow

In focusing on the personal you're missing the big picture, that those same students focus only on the now, and can't see more than the moment in ANY subject. Their, "what's in it for me," extends only moments ahead.

So you might begin a poem with your same title with:
- - - - - -
The teacher speaks in terms of math,
While Susan thinks of taking a bath
With George, who wonders what's for lunch.

She speaks of causality
while Ned daydreams carnality
With Grace and her sorority.

Can they not see...
...
...
- - - - - - - -
Not great poetry, I know. but see my point? instead of telling how YOU see the situation, illustrate the point, that far too many people are slaves of the now, which means that, as they say, "Ten percent of the people do ninety percent of the thinking."

Hope this helps

[BlakHeart]

Thank you, I'll remember that

[iamshadowine]

"Math made you hunt
For the value of X
And it may sound stupid
But you never questioned Y"

Damn, I'll really like this one! keep going!
keep writing :D

[BlakHeart]

Thank you

[Ted Kniffen]

I believe that my chosen path
took me far away from math
and life seems so much brighter
and my mind a little lighter
without a mess of numbers
so back to bedtime slumbers.

Just a bit of fun with math. Your piece is good BlakHeart, well written. One thing, 'That math has thought you' thought maybe taught. A minor thing. Good write.