Right Love?

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My love for you is true

But I cannot act this love

For you wondered the world longer

And this is against the law

 

Yet in very little ways

I express my love for you

You may not hear it

But I shout out my love for you

 

In very little words you’ll hear

The words that render my love

You just have to listen closely

For you to hear the word “I Love You”

 

Reviews

[Rusteangi Ruba]

Blak Heart,
Sometimes people don't understand to know our love, our heart full soul to them.I do agree with your lines.
May a true love says the truth dear..
Your poem 'Right love' was simple ,and beautyful.
Rj

[APOORVA]

simple + adorable + deep + TRUE FEELINGS

[BlakHeart]

Thank you ^^

[zunie frost]

i like it !
simple and perfect

[Johnny]

Well penned, I like it! Maybe a ryhme scheme would be good?

[andrew mitchell]

often these words are not heard as they are held close to the heart. well done!

[Ted Kniffen]

An honest expression of love, albeit it seems unrequited. Not sure about this line 'For you wondered the world longer
And this is against the law'
all in all, a good write.

[BlakHeart]

the line 'For you wondered the world longer ' means that he's older than me and it is prohibited by the law of the human to love a person older than you

[Ted Kniffen]

A difference in age has very little to do with love. Nor, as far as I know is it illegal to love someone older than you. Love is love. Good luck.

[iamshadowine]

This is a really great poem.
"In very little words you’ll hear
The words that render my love
You just have to listen closely
For you to hear the word “I Love You” "
I loved the last stanza. the hope for the person to hear you say how much you love him!
excellent!

keep writing :D

[BlakHeart]

thank you :D

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe we show the words love by staying, caring and kindness. I did like the honest tone in the words. The ending true and wise. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote