The Truth That Lies within

With this pen I write

The battles that I fight

The reason behind my tears

And my agony that nobody hears

 

It’s hard to fight

When darkness slowly eats light

My chapter is near to end

Yet I feel the struggle to gently bend

These silent tears will fall

In this empty halls

Where I’m out of sight

In the dead of the night

 

And now my agonies scream

While everybody id in their dream

Now alone in the dark I am here

Crying out the agony that nobody can hear 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree. Some battles are fought alone.
"And now my agonies scream
While everybody id in their dream
Now alone in the dark I am here
Crying out the agony that nobody can hear "
I liked the tone of the above lines. I could feel the pain and the struggle. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[GalaxyGhost]

This is so true for me, too, because when no one else will listen, I turn to writing.

[Ruth]

There may be dark times but with the pen some light is able to enter the wounds. This is voiced with an insight and tangibly written :)

[JainieJane]

I like this, I like the calmness of your words....you can tell alot about a person by the tone of how they write, I imagine you being very calm but full of pain inside that you often probably hide. As for me I sound like an angry person when I write hahaha maybe I am not realizing it..

[Ted Kniffen]

The rhymes are good. There are one or two spelling errors, but nothing major. You're still working B, and you're not alone as long as you're writing and posting. Keep at it.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This one is much more dark then your other poem. There is so much pain and so much intensity in each line that the reader can feel some part of it. There is an emotional depth which turns the reading of this poem into a journey of pain which in the end satisfies you with pleasure. There are two typing mistakes- 1. You have typed Halls instead of hall
2. you have typed id instead of is
Anyway, good work. Keep writing.