Love is a Crime

Hope you like it

If loving a person is a crime
Then I should be in jail by now

Locked up in the highest tower
For I have been madly in love

But my heart is being buried by now
For ithas perish for loving you

Reviews

[Irenic]

But my heart is being buried by now
For ithas perish for loving you

these lines I liked the most.
The poem is very beautifully written. your poem in a very straight forward gives the message that love is not a crime. The way you have written is quiet straightforward and creative.

Keep on writing.
Thanks for sharing :)

[BlakHeart]

you're very welcome :D

[Irenic]

...........:-)

[AliciaB]

Very nice! There are a few grammar errors in the first and third stanzas, but those have been commented on already, so I won't go into that. The idea of love being a crime is rather interesting - it seems as if there is a story behind this statement, one that is just barely hinted at in the poem. The contrast between "the highest tower" and "being buried" is also cool. Good work!

[Teja]

Nice poem and nice expression of thoughts. Ignoring few gramatical errors the poem is good one. I liked it.

[GalaxyGhost]

I love the strong contrast of love and the tortures of jail. You, ma'am, have a wonderful way using words!

[BlakHeart]

Thank you very much :D

[Zaliodir]

Very lovely poem, but there are a few grammatical errors. Let me give you and example of how it should look:

If loving a person is a crime
Then I should be in jail by now

Locked up in the highest tower
For I have been madly in love

But my heart is being buried now
It has perished from loving you

I hope this helps a little.

Salamaat po! =)

[BlakHeart]

Thank you very much for the correction :)

[Zaliodir]

Walang anuman. =)