Mistaken Love

Hope you like it

I blow a kiss at you 

But some how misses you

It made it's own way to space

And kisses the sun

It was some how brighter

But still you cannot see

For you thought it was her

But truely jt came from me

My heart broke onto pieces

But it will not pull me down

I picked the pieces of my heart

Fixed it and searched for new

The lights fade out

Then knew it was from me

You tried to get me back 

But is too late for that

Reviews

[Addict With a Pen]

Beautiful poem, I really enjoyed reading this! I love the first paragraph, its truly perfect.

[barleygirl]

Every single aspect of this message is not clear to me, but there are some parts of your message which are crystal clear & spot on, provoking memories of similar situations in life for me. The first stanza reminds me of the way we might be acting in an affectionate way towards someone who doesn't even notice us, but there's a bigger entity that DOES see & support our loving intent. I couldn't quite figure out this line: "it was somehow brighter" (WHAT was brighter?) Other than that, I relate to the 2nd & 3rd stanzas as the way it can go in the early stages of noticing & attracting another love interest. I most enjoy the overall message of "snooze, ya lose" -- the object of affection does not see the narrator's interest & caring, until it's too late. The reader feels some satisfaction from the ending, becuz the narrator is not sticking around to be dismissed anymore.

[BlakHeart]

Thank you so much :)