Hatred

Just a few words collected together. It sounded nice so I just wrote it.

deep hatred from within
skies darkening
evening shelter from sins
the happy souls waning
Cries to be heard from very far away
Tears streaming down the cursed stone
Blood pouring from the deadly ways
Bittersweet, together in a cone
Colors of miseries merging
Pains from hearts breaking
Haunting music transposing
The loud dins of cackling
Failures of life haunting
Devils and sins in the making
Feelings all faking
The stone walls shaking
What had it all turned into?
Madness.

Reviews

[Enigma]

And you say you don't rhyme!!
That rhyme up there is better than mine!!
OMG!! I'm so good...
YOU're RHYME's GREAT, you fool!
I just wanna say, you wrote it well
It's all right now, I can tell...
Whoa! That rhyme was exhausting!..*phew*
Anyway, plz don't be mad for calling you a fool.My vocabulary is limited so I have to struggle to rhyme words.I hope you aren't angry with me....
About the poem, it's really dark.It filled me up with the mixed feelings of hatred and madness.You chose powerful words and it all came out well enough.I like it!!!
(Keep Reviewing!!)