Night Hides

It traveled across a homeless man ,hopeless face

it ripped a girls bra away with disgrace

then it trickled in my yard, through my screen door

it slithered arcoss my bedroom floor

I tried to cover the chills with pills

I tried holding the thrills with fear

It wouldn't go away

 

How you fall so slowly and still catches me off guard

The time doesn't represent your power

3am and it's still dark

No kid, but junkie now playing in the park

Fighting, Clubbing,Talking,Night Walking

thats when the creepers do their best stalking

You cover everything bright with darkness, but man made light

That try to hide the fear you put upon people

or when the hooker do their best lays

the night really pays

it wouldn't go away

 

I woke up in the sun rays bullies your forceful ways

so you leave , but you plan your return

thats when I open my window and thank the sun

The sun get restless

and you return chestless

Night

It wouldn't go away

F**k what you say

Its the worst time of the...

well can't fully call it day

It wouldn't go away

It only hides

 

Author's Note

Something I wrote in the car rifing through downtown charlotte....mmmm

Reviews

[quill of shadows]

theres a difrent way of looking at things verry well writen good imagry. though its not my style i still like this one alot great job ,QoS

[bluessadmood]

Ohh this is new ..talking to the night..
how it travels across a homeless man face,and witnessed a girl ripped off her bras with disgrace
And you trickled in my yard through my door,and I covered the chills with pills
Three at night so dark ,no kid only a junkie playing in the park
You cover everything bright,but we made the light to hide the fear
a hooker do their best lays when the night really pays
Lovely reflection an the night time and what it brings along with it
this is like a scene pondering about what may happen through a whole night
I liked the panoramic events that you draw here
lovely write..

[Crowley]

OMG...first off, that song on your page is my favorite Kings of Leon song. Nice way to wake up on a Friday morning when I don't have to work. Your poem was so good. I kinda felt that way last Monday night, chillin' with friends on the patio throwing back the wine and listening to the drama unfold. It was way past bed time. A lot of nice imagery here and the depth and seediness that a long night can seem like comes through for sure. The writing and the rhythm are very solid. Nice job girl.

[S]

I have read over a few of your poems and still do not feel like I have a grasp on your style. There seems to be a few grammar errors, minor yes but they came out in moments when the flow of this piece was reeling me in. I like your choice of subject matter, the night has so much to hide and seems to provide an openness to elements who/which equally loath the light. Your imagery is lush, and provokes moments I myself have experienced in a few cities. Salute

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i like the way you express sadness of life..in this write...well writen

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Life is full of many bad things and we will never get away from them we must just concentrate on the beauty that shines through them... very creative and well expressed piece. Love it.