Bound Longing.

My pages bleed forgivness for you,

Cut by that which is mightier than the sword.

My eyes poor empty, burst the damn,

Releasing the ocean of emotion beyond it.

My hands blister through my soul,

Mourning the death of our union.

 

To see  love, you must merely read my thoughts.

To see my torture, that void in

My mind you made vacant.

The voice that echoes throughout

My skull, bouncing from bone to bone,

Informing me of your departure.

 

Without you by my side, to measure,

To recoil at my words, they flow freely.

Unlike the others, these calamities

Called sentences,

They plead for you, they call you

Back into my arms.

 

They beg the highest powers

To bring you into view.

I know ther is nothing i can

Say to return you to my

Life , but without your smiles, it is a

Sham of a life, undeserving of any worth.

 

My words are my soul, my pen is my body

When i write for you, i am giving you all i have.

Lifeless i lay, curled up, waiting, waiting

for my life to recieve that light you carry within,

to give rebirth to my soul, to reignite the fire

that drives me towards greatness, apathy of ambition.

 

Your re-entry to my story will signal my growth,

Never letting my love leave you, no matter where

you go, my love will follow, protecting every step you

take, allowing you to live on.

Although you may be gone, your essence is to be eternal

In the form of my words, my love.

Author's Note

i know the las 3 stanzas fall down a bit, bt any criticism would be greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

clever word choices and some very descriptive imagery combine to create a very effective and emotionally charged write. i would take a minute to clean out a few spelling bugs (very minor)but aside for that i am inclined to give this write very high marks. well penned.

[Firefly]

Means alot, thank you.

[quinfinn]

you're welcome

[Rahul]

you made it. It's a nice poem every word showed and represent a diff. meaning with each an every line.
nicely penned, loved this one.

[Firefly]

Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

A good one...:)

[Firefly]

Cheers :)

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[Roxii]

This piece is very well written, even the last three stanzas. your words flow and I can tell that they mean a lot to you. Keep on writing.

[Firefly]

Thank you

[Roxii]

your very welcome.

[Oceana]

This is wonderful, you create so much imagery with the intense feelings this piece evokes. As beautiful as it is sad. Nicely done

[Firefly]

Thank you very much!

[Lexi Villanueva]

I love this

[Firefly]

Thank you

[InsanityWriter]

So much power and emotion! This is truly and excellent piece. :)

"To see love, you must merely read my thoughts.
To see my torture, that void in
My mind you made vacant.
The voice that echoes throughout
My skull, bouncing from bone to bone,
Informing me of your departure."

Favorite stanza ^^^ ;) Great imagery!! All I'd suggest is looking it over for spelling stuff and it's good. (:

100/100

[Firefly]

Thank you! I was sure if this was up to standard but i'm glad you liked it :) and i noticed the errors after i wrote it but i haven't had to time for correction, i shall when i have more time :) thank you ^_^