Have a Beautiful Decay

Me and my friend Jerrel was having a rap battle. I came out with this

All I wanted to say, Babe,

Was, you making me insane

I gave you everything I had

And you begging me for more

What could I have left for you

You gold-digging-w***e

I loved you,

Hell, I gave you everything

And all you say

Is Have A Beautiful Decay

 

 

Author's Note

I try to rap, but I'm not that good

Not for you VP

Reviews

[Jessi Berlasty]

"Was, you (you're) making me insane" "And you (you're) begging me for more" I love it.

[Jane Doe]

lol i love it wonderfulvpiece

[FireWoman]

You nailed the title, you need a killer hook to pull the reader in. Poetry is much like rapping, get a sic cadence and it just flows.
Great job.