Brain-wash

I guess it's an incomplete poem since I've lost my train of thoughts.

I could use a brain-wash

For mine is full of s**t

For I would rather forget

And more days have got to come

 

I could use a brain-wash

To end up my regret

To make me accept

What yet, is to come

 

For I was wrong to believe

That you would change

That you would rage

That you would even grieve

 

I could use a brain-wash

To wash away the blood

The bodies in the mud

And the lies of the scum

 

I could use a brain-wash

To lay in peace and sleep

To join all the sheep

And silence the deepest drum

 

But they are not good at lies

Not as friendly as they seem

Bloody is their scheme

I can see through their disguise

 

I could use a brain-wash

To wash away my hope

That ties me like a rope

I could use some rum

Author's Note

Reviews are welcomed.

Reviews

[Nyida Strong]

We've all seen things, felt things that we want to forget, but I think that pain makes us stronger because we have survived it all. I can understand the sentiment, drown memories and pain in something tangible. Very good piece. This is going in my library.

N. Strong

[olla]

this is very good.. I might need some of that Rum myself..

[Namaa Hammond]

now this is something that makes people who can't relate to it think deeper to figure out what it is. but for me i can relate to it so it makes perfect sense. this one is truly an epic piece!

[RainQueen]

I absolutely love this poem. It is incomplete in that the brain-wash may have been arrested as the soothing rum coated the parched throat, but it's as if you plucked a measure or two from my very mind. This is an elegant rant, Ind I loved reading it. Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a complete poem. Rum can clean up the mind for a few hours. I like the flow of the poem and the emotion. Most of us could use a brain-wash. Take all the useless things and tossed them away. I did like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pi Cee]

So could the rest of us who've seen destruction, pain, who have memories not worth remembering with the knife they bring to our heart.
Great write, keep up.

[Lily Mae]

I could use a brain wash and some rum myself. Even though I did try the rum the other night and all I got was sick..
You have captured the painful emotions well of being lied to.. I'm not sure anymore where or if truth exists. Well done.