They call me rEVOLution

 
I am but life of pain that lives through words of freedom
My body is a temple of bones, scorns … and tar
Imprisoned by my liberty
The one that seems to be limited
 
I am the unfair, love and wars
The love that I seek
And the war to get it
Both are unfair, both leave scars
 
I am a generation, education and limitation
Of what meant to be real
Of what I’m supposed to feel
I am all, whole and less
 
I am but life through pain that ache from words of freedom
My body is a temple of stones, dawns … and tar
Imprisoned by my humanity
The one that seems to be perfected
 
I am despair that flows along blood
The voice of who can’t speak
The blind who cannot peek
The human origin, I’m mud
 
I am inspiration, occupation and immigration
Of the nobles and their stand
Of blood over the land
I am what all miss
 
I am but life and pain that write the words of freedom
My body is a temple of mourns, crowns … and tar
Imprisoned by identity
The one that seems to be omitted
 
I am the stare of a hungry child
The struggle of the week
 The abyss and the peak
The urban and the wild
 
They call me revolution
Of hope, their final beam
Their mean to redeem

The chaos of emptiness

Author's Note

Reviews are welcomed

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

'I am the stare of a hungry child
The struggle of the week..' i think you meant 'weak' ?

'I am the unfair, love and wars
The love that I seek
And the war to get it
Both are unfair, both leave scars'

-Loved this one.

So many colors in this poem. Your play with words and hidden meanings is clever and original.

'My body is a temple of mourns, crowns … and tar
Imprisoned by identity
The one that seems to be omitted'

-excellent stanza. Very thought-provoking and darkly deep. Keep writing! 87.

[bookworm]

There are so very many poignant, jaw dropping lines here. I would have to paraphrase your whole poem. Wow. Wow. Wow. That's all that keeps coming to mind. This is shockingly good and raw and smart and just in your face, wake the f**k up folks, feel this, feel me, its all right here, right now.....

Good God....I need another coffee to swallow this write....xo

[Ubiquitous]

Wow, very powerful. Your words create a tone of emptiness and being agitated, very well written.

[CherryBomb]

This was amazing! I loved every single writing strength in this poem! Im extremely inspired and impressed by your writing! good job! :)

[Nao Deguchi]

From where you come from, is there a lot of strife? Only a person with the perspective of suffering, could have written this. Most people are blind to true suffering, I think you know what I mean.

"I am inspiration, occupation and immigration"

This line said a lot for me.

[TheBlackmage]

I thought this was a a very well done poem i wish my own were this good. It was delightfully dark at time and This is the third time i've read it and it won't be the last :D

[The Winter Grey]

I really liked this, both as poem and as a social/political commentary. You balanced the heavy weight of war and its effects on a nation in a meaningful and profound way. I especially enjoyed the way the first stanza returned throughout the story, changing each time to fit the narrator's perspective. Excellent job, keep it up.

[olla]

this is one I will have to read again and again..

[Lost]

Lovely, shadowy and ancient. Nice use of rhyming when you do. I can feel how meaningful this piece is to you, how relevant. It hits home...

[Lily Mae]

You really described the emotions of love well.. The fight the love the balance between the two..and as I read I thought wow..sometimes it's to hard...xx

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the story and the desire of the poem. Sometime change is hard. Some revolutions can take a lifetime. Some are in days. Change don't mean better. Could lead us to a worst place? Great ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote