Holy city of sin

My personal image of Utopia and Babylon

Holy city of sin

 

Dare ye enter Utopia citizen of Babylon

Dare ye leave thy wrath, thy lust

Dare ye enter alone

 

Dare ye defy thine creed

Art ye to forget yer vain

Shalt ye repulse greed

 

Can ye control thine lust

Art ye to repent of yer sin

Art we ye to trust

Shalt we let ye in

 

Alas if ye did

Alas if ye can

Thine people we forbid

Leave young man

 

For if ye repent yer sin

If we let ye in

Sinners we shalt be

For ye were once free

 

And cursed shalt be the dawn

When ye carve yer name in stone

To dwell our terrain

Saint among the insane

 

Behold young lad we worship the unknown

Of freedom we know none

One is slave of his own

 

Thine heart desires redemption

Among those who sought corruption

At the land of tower of stone

Where crashed art flesh and bone

 

If well you wish to serve

My crown I don’t deserve

Ye wish to serve Utopia

And I wish to rule Babylon

 

Author's Note

Reviews are welcomed.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

History allow story to grow. The myth of Babylon allow us to dream and ponder the action of a old time and history. I like the concept and desire of your words. Last line made the poem complete. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Bailey B.]

An interesting piece for sure! Easy to read, yet still captivating. Very nice :)

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Superb! and that i must admit.....

[The Winter Grey]

Excellent... the old english breathe a great deal of charm to words that a lesser poet may have cheapened. There are several high points, but my favorite line would have to be, "Saint among the insane." It brings a great deal of imagery.

[Stella]

It's nice how you took a piece of history and transformed into a poem! So far you haven't written a poem that haven't enjoyed reading.

[Seshat Nidaba]

You are of course, one of my favorite poets here and yet I cannot say exactly why, it's perhaps that you balance all that is good about poetry and possess an underlining mastery of the craft and harmony of composition. This is a good example of your verse, technique with meaning. The 2nd to last stanza makes this poem.

Beautiful piece of history into your words... especially the last stanza! As I know the stories about making the famous tower, all did without speaking the same language, but they did it, as you and me, are both not from here, and dare to write. Excellent.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Utopia, Babylon...the language...the history in this poem is terrific...

[Leon R]

I like your view on Utopia and Babylon. It fits in the idea i have but in the same differs and gives me a new idea. Also nice choice of words, they make the write easy to read but in the same time interesting till the end.