Half opened door

Was that the end

My dear good friend

 

A moment of rage

To pay up your wage

To cut loose a bound

For one made a change

 

A spark of fire

And your desire

To tear it all down

While I retire

 

Was I just a stage

To fill your empty page

A shelter to your grief

Your emotional relief

 

Perhaps I’ve changed

Perhaps I raged

But my battles end on one ground

I retreat to save that bound

 

For now the truth I have found

And you must hear me

You must fear me

Because my voice has a sound

 

If I made a mistake

The blame I can take

But the future is there

If you still care

 

But it would be your shame

If you forfeit the game

And that would be fair

For once I held the blame

 

We all must change in order to dwell

I may have changed, you did as well

Against each others we can hold our knives

Regret our fights all our lives

 

But again I will stand my ground

Leash my inner hell hound

and pace two steps back on the floor

only to leave you a half opened door

 

I’d drown you tiered, won’t let you lose

I’ll make you the judge of what you accuse

And I’ll be a noble knight

Until you prove it right

 

And I will drop my guard

Even if you scheme a fraud

And I’ll need none to defend

None to offend

 

For truth shall shine at least for a dawn

For you will reap what you have sewn

For you were once a friend

Another beginning, perhaps another end

Reviews

[Aline S. Iniestra]

Strong, to the point, a very fine and delicate way to say things. Love the statemtns and the attitude. Excellent job! :)

[Sara Mercury]

"Tare" should be "tear"; "nobel" should be "noble"; "sawn" should be "sewn".

This sounds very familiar right now in my own life.

A very good poem, full of genuine feelings.

[Calypso]

Wonderfully written and emotional.

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow, this is really strong. I like it! :3 There were some really, really strong images here too. Especially the mention of the "inner hell hound". The only advice I could give is that you mispelled "tare" in the 3rd stanza. It should be "tear".
Great poem you've written here!

[YouoweYoupay]

I can def. relate to that. Strong, raw emotions and a sad story. Keep writing.

-Wela.