Never Die

wakeup in the meddle of the night
turn off any damned light
before the sun touches my head
I run away and go to bed

I hate to sleep but I have to try
I have my tears but I never cry
I believe this lovely lie
of never sleep never die

many miles I have to go
many faces I do not know
they don't know what sets ahead
when the sun is gone and the moon is dead

the world is dead alone I'm awake
the sound of silence alone I break
waiting for a nightwalker before the dawn
to walk with her around the town

and now I see that it's me
the one who'll never be free
afraid to sleep and never get up
to die alone and no one to see

Author's Note

One of my first poems

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

One of the first poems, with rough spots and smudges and rhymes all over and very obvious. But before we get lost in the growing of skills, and before abstract more developed terms take place, the faraway young first papers seem to have this taste, this scent, that other more mature works don't contain. I love the use of the sun and the moon, and the way you make me envision that life in the end remains circulating about yourchoices and about the roads that lie ahead of you and only you can decide which one to walk. Good write. Thanks for sharing.

-youoweyoupay.

[M.Kilani]

True, a lot have changed since then, my work now seems more directed, it lacks this amateur touch and rough imagery, back then the focus was more on rhyme and words used to come out naturally without being forced, now it feels a bit "monitored" and somehow artificial.
Thanks for such a profound review.

[The Winter Grey]

For this to be one of your earliest poems, it is quite well done. An occasional tweak here or there to give it a little more spark wouldn't hurt, but you are gifted at crafting the closing stanza. Really, each time I reach the end of one your poems I just sit back in wonder. Good job.

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Considering that it was one of your early works, its a stand out for sure.
Although i would beg you to check your very first line for a spelling error. Rest assured you did well.

[CherryBomb]

very nice! expecially from the fact that this poem can be looked at from many different ways.. whether its love, sad, and angry.

[WritersSoul]

Some great knowings in life all woven in this great poem :)
Beth :3

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime in a life. Hard to see any good things. A powerful story in the poem. I like the strong statements in the poem.
"many miles I have to go
many faces I do not know "
Life is a million mile journey. Need a lot of luck and hard work. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Ruth]

Are we ever free, even after death? Who knows, this is haunting in reflection!
A great poem sweety!
Thought provoking too
xx

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

a very sorrowful and meaningful poem that have struck the hearts of the readers...nice work!

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Wonderful....it is..a phenomenal piece for a 'one of the first'...to never die...a recurring theme...extremely well-written and profound :)

[Emotionally Blank yet F..]

Wow! Even with this being one of your first poems it's pretty amazing. But I can also see how far you've come in poetry. You just have natural talent. :)