Huntress

 

Huntress is every woman … huntress is every eve

Hearts she seeks and destroys … outside each room she leave

A scheme she weaves for many men … and changes what men believe

How many men had cried for you … how many still weep and grieve

 

 

How many men for you have yielded … for you the fate had dare

How many hearts hanged on your dress … how many strangled in you hair

If only you did feel there pain … but never you are aware

Screams of years upon the earth … no stone, mountain, stone can bear

 

 

 

Huntress you are a sister, friend, daughter, and mother

Forgive this man for what he said forgive what he did utter

This man is only a prey for you my huntress did suffer

For huntress man wish and pray yet you go hunt another

Author's Note

This may sound Anti-feminist but it's somehow the truth !!

Reviews

[Ashfallen]

I think the pain here is quite real and yearning to escape, but only partially making its way out onto the page.

Fortunately, not all women are represented by your experience, just as not all men are represented by mine (and lucky for us both that this is the case!)

A few, hopefully constructive, points:
Check spelling ("their", not "there")
Check word usage ("leaves" vs. "leave")
Check tense and keep consistent.
Punctuation: consider commas, or even semicolons instead of the ellipses. Make sure you are using the correct one to achieve your intended effect.

[M.Kilani]

thanks Cherrie glad you liked it :D

[Cherrie Palmer]

good use of images and your words flow smooth and easy, the story is made clear and I liked it.

[M.Kilani]

@Coyote Poetry : I do respect women in general but I believe they are natural huntresses, they just attract men and "take them down" and it seems that men do not mind it !!
@Franklin : it is somehow intentional .. I don't want women coming after me calling me an anti-feminist then they will hunt me down for sure :P

thank you guys for the review

[Franklin...]

Good poem. Nice rhyme, though it does falter a little in the last stanza(unless that was intentional). Second line of second stanza is my favorite, it's a nice bit of imagery.
The only thing I'd disagree with is the first line, for while there certainly are huntresses, I think this sort make up a minority of women.
Good write.

[Coyote Poetry]

My personal opinion. Woman are the strength and power in a family. Woman can create life and give hope and love if she desires. I like the poem. Huntress maybe a hard term for a woman. The woman in our life control the emotion and strength in a family. I believe Mother, Grandmother and Sister are words to be honors. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote