Immortal oblivion

Immortal oblivion

 

I dig them upon the wall

Just before the end of my time

For one day gone would be all

Silent I shall be, only silence shall have a rhyme

 

For tomorrow is the end of today

And a smile is the end of dismay

When oblivion haunts a friend

When all what’s left of me is lost and dead

 

So shall my name be

Archaic yet before their eyes

The homeless, not the free

The truth beneath all lies

 

Fades away my name,

Fades away my shame,

As will as the words of my memorial

Vanquished they will be, by oblivion, the immortal

 

Reviews

[Namaa Hammond]

dark into optimism theres always a light at the end of the tunnel. (not in my case jk) but this does give me motivation to keep walking through the invisa-tunnel i am going through and the last stanza true we all wont be one day. but well be immortal at the same time. memories can last. then again nothing lasts forever. nice one :)

[Ruth]

What will there be left when words have guided decay home? Well..maybe this versus it all, great piece xox

[Dark Angel]

It is said time heals all wounds, but this poem is really good in saying wounds are made deeper in time... Or at least I think that's what this is meant to be about.... ^_^ I love the rhyme scheme, it's really good.

[A.r. Bazian]

one thing i didn't get... dig them upon the wall? you mean carve them?

this is quite good! but you need to do something about the dig thing, unless you have something in mind!

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Thought inspiring..to say the least...immortality..darkness...oblivion...silence...

[nono]

Nice, but I think I'd rather die in my own time than just you know...Live forever, because if the world ends and you live forever no matter what. Now that's gonna be some pain ain't it? Nice poem though...makes a person think...

[Michael X]

the imortal lives on through the angish and sorrow that is lieft behind in his
living well, this has a memorable flow and indictation t conviction,
powerful emotions play to a theatrical focus and depth, awsome job!