The puddles in people's minds | 100 word flash fiction

Monsoons hit early at Regal apartments, stalling the restructuring of the walker’s garden.
The fresh green patches turned to brown slippery patches of mud, as the rain invited itself every alternate day.
The society members wouldn’t waste a minute, drinking tea with some small talk.
The architects were the first to opine, “Poor planning from the maintenance committee!”.
The husbands were pessimistic, “Now the gossip will  spread indoors.”.
The elders relaxed in front of the TV, “Now it is too slippery outside, too dangerous.”
The children, however, were most ecstatic, “Now we have a new slide in the park!”       

Author's Note

Every comment is a cloud of encouragement.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I don’t think I’ve seen many 100-word-flash pieces that include so many characters or so much dialogue – a very creative way to approach this challenge! You’ve taken “rain” and “puddles” and “mud” to a new level of expression, especially well done for so few words! Every line is packed with originality. I love the different groups of people you bring into the story. The best part is the kids, sliding in the mud, which is what everyone really prefers to do, but only the kids actually do it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Riddhi]

The way you expressed the entire thing is worth appreciating...I can imagine the entire thing and actually a picture of monsoon season was painted in front of my eyes..I live in flat apartments so actually this is the thing which always happens in my neighborhood during the monsoon season..I must say that you are indeed a creative writer..And we can learn from this the situation is same but the way to think and deal with that particular situation is what makes the difference.I loved the way that you told about what everyone thinks and how children think positively about the same situation of which the adults were thinking so negatively....Actually I remembered the famous quote by our former president Dr. A P J Abdul Kalam as soon as I finished reading this story that All birds find shelter during the rain but eagle avoids the rain by flying above the clouds..Problems and situations are common in our life but our perspective makes the difference...You know I am 17 years old girl and when Monsoon arrives we children , we get so happy that we can play football in those slippery grounds but no one appreciates us for our positive thinking rather they don't allow us go in the playground...Haha...Anyway ,
Well done and Keep on writing...

[Neville]

I like it too and yes, just goes to show how we each have different expectations and perceptions... Neville

[Kichu]

Yes, children always looks at things with a different perspective. Adults can learn many things from them

[Neville]

Yes, we can indeed.... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

This is very clever. The differing opinions ... I like it

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